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Critics Wrote a poem in the sand, Wonder how it fares if left alone, Will it bear on its own merits Or juxtapose by meddling hands, Meantime, sun-dries it again, Wind shifts it broad and thin, Indelible puddles left by rain, Sand critters pop out and in, A boy and his ball rolls along, With a long sigh, looks on down, Builds a sandcastle then leaves, Ebbtide gone, flood tide flows cleanly, I returned, stood and discern, Comme ci, comme ca, c'est la vie. 14th line English translated from French, "Like this, like that, that is life." 05/09/2019 *POTD* ~~Team PoetrySoup *6th Place* old poems, FREE VERSE (003) ~~Poet Destroyer A

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Date: 7/12/2019 12:04:00 PM
A wonderfully written piece. Seems so much of life is temporary.
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William Kekaula
Date: 7/12/2019 1:04:00 PM
I am appreciative for your astute commentary ~ William
Date: 7/11/2019 4:54:00 AM
I like it... Simple but deep in a way. Good job!
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Date: 7/11/2019 1:17:00 PM
My many thanks for your share ~ William
Date: 6/6/2019 5:50:00 PM
Hello William Kekaula, the sand always washes away love letters in the sand. Aloha! Darlene have a nice evening my friend.
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William Kekaula
Date: 6/6/2019 8:11:00 PM
Thanks so much for your kindness and your support Darlene, Aloha William
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Date: 6/6/2019 8:10:00 PM
Date: 6/2/2019 11:33:00 AM
Beautiful piece. Brilliant writing, my friend.
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William Kekaula
Date: 6/2/2019 11:48:00 AM
I am appreciative of your insights Franci, Aloha William
Date: 6/1/2019 6:21:00 PM
that was a fine poem, as are the couple i've read...this particular ones theme reminds me of my last write written wrotten wroten wright....ah well, c'est la vie blown sand
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Date: 6/1/2019 7:21:00 PM
An extended gratitude for your valued input--I extend an invite to my most recent post for it shows, the other part of my preferred style other than the above simplistic, rawness ( a formed that garnered 5th, 4th, 3rd, 2nd, and two 1st) to the etheralistic me, whereto, I've posted--been a Souper for a month and three days, Aloha William
Date: 5/13/2019 2:56:00 AM
C'est la vie; c'est la guerre...POTD is only fair (for such a great write. Congrats! ~ gw
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Date: 5/13/2019 10:33:00 AM
Thanks much Gershon! Aloha wk
Date: 5/10/2019 7:57:00 PM
Oui! Oui! This one certainly deserving of POTD! Congratulations, my friend!
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Date: 5/10/2019 8:02:00 PM
'Twas a real treat for me, re soupers response made me giddy, thanks Kim, Aloha @wk
Date: 5/9/2019 10:26:00 PM
I was captivated by the magic of your poem, William. Your last line is a brilliant finale to this shining gem. A fav! Congratulations on your wonderful and well-deserved recognition with POTD honors.. Warmest wishes ~Susan
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Date: 5/9/2019 11:13:00 PM
Your extended courtesies are simply overwhelming as I fumble for words, I am humbled, Aloha @wk
Date: 5/9/2019 8:24:00 PM
Writing in the sand is like writing in the air. Appearing only for a short amount of time. Yes, tels sont les moments de la vie. Congratulations William, on Poem of the Day. :) Brandy
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Date: 5/9/2019 8:49:00 PM
Oui, mademoiselle Brandy, as doctors are their worst patients, how different are writers being their worst critics, thank you for your kinds words, Aloha @wk
Date: 5/9/2019 5:14:00 PM
William, Mais ainsi va la vie. A gift! Thank you and congratulations on your deserving POTD! : )
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William Kekaula
Date: 5/9/2019 6:47:00 PM
Oui madame Connie, and I humble myself in its shadow, Au revoir and Aloha, @wk
Date: 5/9/2019 5:01:00 PM
What a wonderful, creative mind you have. Congratulations on POTD, William. All the best~Warren
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Date: 5/9/2019 6:44:00 PM
For I stand amongst giants, very kind of you Warren! Aloha, @wk
Date: 5/9/2019 4:53:00 PM
Congratulations on your lovely poem being awarded POTD. Aloha I'm in Waikiki Beach at the moment on business, beautiful as always. Might have seen those 2 hearts in the sand...Maria :)
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Date: 5/9/2019 5:39:00 PM
Ah yes those darn trips, business and what-not's, eh, albeit, this is a great way to get to know our soupers. Aloha @wk
Date: 5/9/2019 4:07:00 PM
Wonderfully creative! Panagiota
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William Kekaula
Date: 5/9/2019 5:23:00 PM
Thanks Panagiota and have yourself a great day! Aloha @wk
Date: 5/9/2019 11:57:00 AM
Wow! William, I'm so happy that I read you this morning. "Word" potent! Excellent job. Congrats on getting the day. It was well deserved:-) Alexis
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Date: 5/9/2019 12:17:00 PM
I was moved by your words, so touchingly appreciated beyond measure, Aloha @wk
Date: 5/9/2019 10:11:00 AM
Some poems are written for eyes, some for ears, others for hearts...only write will tell...though all will be felt...Congratulations William...Comme ci, comme ca, c'est la vie.
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Date: 5/9/2019 10:31:00 AM
Wonderfully said with so much care, thanks Arturo! Aloha @wk
Date: 5/9/2019 8:49:00 AM
Wonderful piece William! Word perfect, a fave :) Congratulations on POTD honours! xomo
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Date: 5/9/2019 9:50:00 AM
Many thanks for making my day! Aloha @wk
Date: 5/9/2019 8:45:00 AM
Sand scriptures...like everything else, washes away with time...lovely write, William and Congrats!! on POTD!!...^WW^
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Date: 5/9/2019 9:45:00 AM
Thanks for your words, as well as, your witty sign off! Aloha @wk
Date: 5/9/2019 8:38:00 AM
Congratulations on your poem being awarded as the Soup's new POTD!
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Date: 5/9/2019 9:43:00 AM
Thanks for I am well pleased, Aloha @wk
Date: 5/9/2019 7:25:00 AM
I really enjoyed this wonderful poem, William, congrats on POTD. John
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Date: 5/9/2019 7:50:00 AM
Kind of you to say John, Thank you! Aloha William...
Date: 5/9/2019 6:55:00 AM
Congrats William on poem of the day..this is such a beautiful poem!
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William Kekaula
Date: 5/9/2019 7:55:00 AM
I'm in appreciation of your goodness, Aloha William...
Date: 5/9/2019 6:53:00 AM
Congrats on POTD....
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William Kekaula
Date: 5/9/2019 7:58:00 AM
Thanks Joseph, Aloha William...
Date: 5/9/2019 6:32:00 AM
- I've written in the sand ... congratulations on yours p.o.t.d. William - A lovely poem :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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William Kekaula
Date: 5/9/2019 8:02:00 AM
I extend my courtesies towards your gracious innateness, Aloha William...
Date: 5/9/2019 4:54:00 AM
Congratulations on POTD William, I enjoyed your poem!
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William Kekaula
Date: 5/9/2019 5:07:00 AM
It is kind of you for your acknowledgements Tania, Aloha William...
Date: 5/9/2019 4:09:00 AM
I for one would stop to read before nature eroded it. Congratulations William on POTD. Tom
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Date: 5/9/2019 5:05:00 AM
New kid on the block, albeit, thanks on the greater of the niceties that's been attributed Tom, Aloha William...
Date: 5/9/2019 2:35:00 AM
I really enjoyed this poem, William. I wonder how many of us have written something special in the sand. I bet it's thousands. Great ending too! Congratulations on receiving POTD. Faved....
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William Kekaula
Date: 5/9/2019 2:45:00 AM
Still somewhat of a newbie at this website to know all of its subtleties, but thanks a whole lot still the same, Aloha William...
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