Cradled into Sleep

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April 30- 2025

Your Choice X Poetry Contest

Sponsor- Brian Strand

as the glowworms
in the stygian night

threw flickers of light 
like scattered gems,

when little birdies cuddled under
their mother’s warmth,

while the long whistle of a train
was dying in the distance,

I sensed the indulgent grip
of the hands of Sleep 

who took me 
to his gilded chamber of dreams!

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Bj Legros Kelley

Date: 5/15/2025 5:03:00 PM

So sweet, quietly set to the sounds that lull into the sweet and welcoming arms of a restful sleep. I love this poem Valsa <3

Silent One

Date: 5/5/2025 7:15:00 AM

Your poem is delicate and enchanting, evoking the quiet beauty of nightfall through vivid, tender imagery. The glowworms casting light "like scattered gems" instantly transports the reader into a hushed, almost magical setting. Each moment the birds under their mother’s warmth, the distant fading whistle of a train builds a sense of calm, safety, and transition from wakefulness to sleep.

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/1/2025 7:23:00 PM

Dear Valsa, your poem is fantastic; it focuses on the quiet and reassuring experience of falling asleep, invoking visuals of nature and pleasant noises that create a peaceful ambiance. The theme also covers the interplay of light and darkness, youth's purity (represented by the small birds), and the transition into the dream realm, portrayed by the figure of Sleep with its "gilded chamber of dreams." Good luck in the contest.

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 5/1/2025 11:14:00 AM

I like your use of subtle fantasy in your poem. It has a comforting quality.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/1/2025 9:46:00 AM

Ahh!!! I enjoyed reading this one. I have slept much better for several nights now and I know that good sleep makes a world of difference. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Sara K

Ink Empress

Date: 5/1/2025 7:40:00 AM

Dear sweet valsa, This is so beautiful and soul warming really! I love the flow and depth of what youv expressed and the softness of your voice in your words truly is impressive and kept me hooked from the very start! A beautiful ending too "I sensed the indulgent grip of the hands of Sleep who took me to his gilded chamber of dreams" how dreamy! This is easily a fave for me! Best wishes! Sending you light always

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 5/1/2025 5:18:00 AM

Dearest Valsa, Ahhhh the gentle magic of night where each image a flicker of comfort, like glowworms scattering gems in darkness. I felt the hush of distant whistles, the warmth of sheltering wings, and the tender surrender to sleep’s embrace. It is amazing how even the quietest moments can shimmer with wonder and guide us softly into dreams. Your words are a soothing light. Spring Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel