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Cracks In Quiet Love

Written: May 09, 2025, for contest Sponsored by: Constance La France Quote: "There is a loneliness more precious than life, there is a freedom more precious than the world." By Rumi **************** The frosty night breeze embraces me tight, Such as a moth-eaten shield, enticing flight. Bitter rain lashes against the sidewalk face, Delicate drops pirouette, each finding its place. Visions flicker by in headlight, fleeting beams, Love's echoes glimmer akin to vanished dreams. How jaded lovers lose spark, turning strangers, Specters in their home, now cloaked in danger. Foreign dialects speak in words we once knew, Widening cracks claim seismic shifts through. Still, optimism clings as I traverse the city chill, Dreams still nudge that love may cure what is ill. Silent tears trace paths down my weary skin, Longing for dawn light, for a raw start within. As the sun rises, distances wantonly wane,   As rainfall fuels flowers, may our link heal again.

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Date: 5/18/2025 5:45:00 AM
Beautifully poginant! Let bitterness, loneliness, feeling like strangers - heal. Great imagery! Great quote from Rumi. Congrats, dear poet!
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Date: 5/17/2025 8:51:00 AM
- Congratulations on your sixteen beautiful lines poem, Las :) - hugs
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Date: 5/17/2025 8:30:00 AM
Congratulations dear poet on your top placement in this contest with a wonderful poem with a masterly diction, very fitting rhymes and a flowing rhythm. It is comforting that despite the outer darkness and inclemencies, the poem highlights the shine of light ahead. Wishing you a pleasant weekend.
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Date: 5/10/2025 6:59:00 PM
This is really breathtaking, Sotto. Your words do really come from a deep place. I loved the final thought.
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Date: 5/10/2025 8:50:00 AM
Ah dr sotto, a very emotive poem this is and youv written it in such an eloquent manner with sublime rhymes and in such a creative cadence! I especially love “ How jaded lovers lose spark, turning strangers, Specters in their home, now cloaked in danger.” felt those emotions of once such warm romance fading leaving lovers jaded and with different dialects that do not seem to reach each others souls! How touching! And i love the quote and ending of your poem too! Im sure will do well! This is a fave for me! Sending you light always
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Date: 5/10/2025 7:56:00 AM
SP, this is a very poetic lament. The way you capture and describe the feeling of loss and distance growing seems remarkable. It makes me feel a bit sad for the character who is suffering and longing for things to be the way they were. Hope you are well!!!
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Date: 5/10/2025 2:22:00 AM
You are a master of poetry. Sixteen lines in perfect rhyme that flows so well. Best for a win.
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Date: 5/9/2025 9:51:00 PM
Very beautiful and well-written. Good luck in the contest, reads like a winner to me. CayCay
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