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Crack

Weep with me winter morning Sing for me a solemn tune Dance for me winter morning Tell me a story before noon Crack Crack Bang A crashing tree limb pulled me breathlessly from my freezing bed. White morning stares viciously in my face, Lingering snow and rain turned everything into hardened ice. Nude trees striped of their autumn leaves Perishes slowly under nature’s weight Crack Crack Bang A laden tree branch lands on my neighbor’s van Everything in sight has frozen to ice Slipping and gliding and humming a tune I Broke the ice just before noon. ©2013 Christine Phillips

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Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 2/9/2014 9:05:00 PM

This is very nice.Christine; We have had our share of cold weather here too. Thanks for sharing this with us... Lucilla

David Fisher

Date: 2/4/2014 7:55:00 PM

Enjoyed this, Christine. So many lines of yours are creative with meaning...seems the ice is inactive, but then creates action.

Chris Hardy

Date: 2/4/2014 7:02:00 AM

You have provided the sound as well as visual...I love this...very nice write....Blessings, Chris

Robert Pettit

Date: 2/3/2014 11:41:00 PM

This is a work that makes good use of a little onomatopoeia. Just add another "p" to "striped" in the fourth line of your second verse. What you have there now means the nude trees have colored bands on them.

D.W. Rodgers

Date: 2/2/2014 11:59:00 AM

Nice, we've been hearing the same sounds here -a serious winter this one.

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 1/19/2014 1:45:00 PM

We had the wind cracking this past week at 85mph. Thank goodness the rain did not come as predicted but only a small amount of snow. Love your nature poem on our winter weather. love phyl

Roger Horsch

Date: 1/11/2014 7:28:00 PM

I must tell you how very very good this poem is Christine, With such description, you pulled me right into the poem. Nice job....Hugs....Roger

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/11/2014 12:28:00 AM

well, gosh, weren't you busy now breaking that ice. This was a unique and fun poem to see. And I am sure glad you passed by my poetry the other day!

Karen Anglesey

Date: 12/22/2013 9:51:00 PM

You made me feel many things in this one. Great write. Brrrrr :)

Ken Carroll

Date: 12/10/2013 3:22:00 PM

Hi Christine, An awesome winter write! Ken

Eileen Manassian

Date: 12/10/2013 3:21:00 AM

Lovely piece, Christine. I could easily visualize it.....and the use of onomatopoeia really made it come alive! Thanks for your recent visit. Hugs

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/9/2013 11:37:00 PM

oh boy you must be getting Utah weather where you are now!! It is horrible! The ice was all over the trees in arkansas where my sister lives. I enjoyed this one!!

Christine Phillips
Date: 12/10/2013 3:08:00 AM

Thank you for your comments.It was a icy Monday. The good thing though, I enjoyed it. I was able to breath fresh air.