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Counting Sheep

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Breathing, counting, don’t ignore the basiC cover up if you sleep commandO. “Monster mosquitoes masticating” in your bayoU. “Disquieting dreams” can be so meaN. “Properly prostrate” on the mattress - don’t siT and stare, nor stress, nor sweat like you’re a tsunamI. One, two, three - begin with “dire determinatioN.” You might imagine “wooly wonders” as you sinG. Peaceful, quiet rest as you atone and blesS each pastoral lamb in the shadow of death husH, your breath, halitosis mixed with lemon and limE. Forget everything and everyonE. In no time, you’ll be fast asleeP. 9/29/2022

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Caren Krutsinger

Date: 10/4/2022 9:28:00 AM

This is truly maginifcently penned! Wow!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/4/2022 3:59:00 PM

Thank you so much, my friend!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/1/2022 10:01:00 AM

Hahaha. I see you struggled with I and used Tsunami too. I bet it was used by many of us with a word that needed to end in I. I really like your topic here.. I used to have insomnia really bad before I got put on progesterone and now I am using my sleeping pills a lot less

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/1/2022 4:10:00 PM

:) Thank you, Andrea! I’m glad your insomnia has gotten better. Hugs ~ Kim

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/1/2022 3:57:00 PM

:) Thank you, Andrea! I’m glad your insomnia has gotten better. Hugs ~ Kim

Jim Slaughter

Date: 10/1/2022 9:56:00 AM

Great, Kim! I don't think I've ever seen/read a "backward" acrostic. Line 3 is a scream...

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/1/2022 4:07:00 PM

Thank you, Jim! Glad you liked that line :) lol

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/1/2022 4:01:00 PM

Thank you, Jim! Glad you liked that line :) lol

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/30/2022 2:14:00 PM

Splendid skillset on display here, Kim--impressive alliteration weaving throughout ---and the bold letters at the end of each line deliver the essence of your theme. You certainly aced the contest requirements.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/30/2022 4:24:00 PM

Thanks so much, Vijay! :)

Ingrid Showalter Swift

Date: 9/30/2022 12:59:00 PM

Hey Kim! Really enjoyed this Especially "monster mosquitoes masticating" And how you made Sit lead to stare in the next line Fun stuff

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/30/2022 1:51:00 PM

Thank you, Ingrid! :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/30/2022 1:49:00 PM

Thank you, Ingrid! :)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/30/2022 12:09:00 PM

- An excellent poem, Kim ... woow ... - I struggle with sleep ... but, don't count sheep :))) - With a fave I can read this poem at night ... when everyone else is sleeping :) - hugs

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/30/2022 12:53:00 PM

Glad you liked it, sweet poet! Hugs ~ Kim