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Twelve is the number of months we journey through; time sprints by, it's true Eleven sounds for the first line - I reckoned five for the second Ten is the count of either fingers or toes; do cool things with those Nine Greek muses sometimes seize my pen's control, whisper to my soul Twelve is the number of months we journey through; twelve full moons to view hundreds of poems, too ~~~ Eight is the count of legs on spooky spiders; creepy web striders Seven - lucky number represents perfect; complete, no defect Six sides on every cell in the honeycomb; queen bee's drippy home Five point emblems on my country's cloth symbol; there's fifty - nimble! Eight is the count of legs on creepy spiders; or four Foo Fighters sipping rum ciders ~~~ Four Gospels depicting Jesus Christ, the Son; God's beloved One Three in One: the focus of church history; holy mystery Two is the number which is highly thought of by couples in love One is the top spot trophy seekers pursue, not content with two Four Gospels depicting Jesus Christ the Son the conflict he won risen like the sun
Lipogram A lipogram is a composition from which the writer systematically omits a certain letter or letters of the alphabet (in this case, the letter 'a'). Half-Eleven Shout out to Soup's own Nina Parmenter, creator of the Half-Eleven: An eleven-line poem consisting of four rhyming couplets and one final rhyming tercet (three-liner). Syllable counts and rhyme scheme as follows: 11 (A) 5* (a) 11 (B) 5* (b) 11 (C) 5* (c) 11 (D) 5* (d) Then a closing tercet of EITHER: 11 (A) (Exact repeat of line 1) 5* (a) 5* (a) ~ OR ~ 5* (a) 5* (a) 11 (A) (Exact repeat of line 1) [*5 syllables is best, but the odd sixth syllable is allowed in these shorter lines if you deem it absolutely Poetically Necessary!] With sincere thanks to Nina! written 3 Sep 2020
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Allison Avatar
September 15, 2020 at 7:52 AM
wow John what a way to showcase your talents and you counted down to a coveted spot in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
Watt Avatar
September 15, 2020 at 8:35 AM
What a clever way to put it, Jan! Thanks for the wonderful comment. Hugs ~ John
Woodrow Avatar
September 14, 2020 at 3:55 PM
interesting...I never considered that all those numbers had no 'a' in them too...and I like the number 9 but had forgotten that there were 9 Greek muses..as to what each of them were, I will have to re-google as I can only remember less than a handful lol...congrats :)
Woodrow Avatar
September 14, 2020 at 4:24 PM
one thousand?! oh goodness....well, next person to host a lipogram A contest is going to get one heck of a countdown lol!! you know, I thought about it for a few seconds but didn't follow thru...thanks for that...1000! :))
Watt Avatar
September 14, 2020 at 4:07 PM
I realized while doing this that the first number with an 'a' is one thousand! I recently wrote a poem about the 9 muses, and I had to google them as well. It's fun learning that way! Thanks for the visit, Susan.
Kauffman Avatar
September 14, 2020 at 2:36 PM
Love this! A cre_ tive wonder of numbers complete with choruses. Kudos and high fives!
Watt Avatar
September 14, 2020 at 3:18 PM
_h_, I see wh_t you did there! The form really challenges the brain because the first word you think of often gets eliminated from your options. Thanks for the kind comment, S_m!
Dietrich Avatar
September 14, 2020 at 1:32 PM
Way to go, John!! you put a lot of effort into yours. I will never know if I messed up my chance or not by that dumb thing I did. Sounds like Emile got lots of good entries. I wish he did standard contests!! Anyway, Congrats and well deserved.
Watt Avatar
September 14, 2020 at 1:51 PM
Thank you, my dear friend! If it's any consolation, I loved your poem about the mystery sky. Enjoy your Monday.
Pinet Avatar
September 14, 2020 at 9:36 AM
Congratulations John, your poem earned a distinguished place in my contest. This was one of the hardest contest I’ve ever had to judge, the quality of the poems entered were outstanding and yours stood out amongst them, well done my friend, Emile.
Watt Avatar
September 14, 2020 at 10:51 AM
Very grateful my friend, both for the contest and the generous assessment. I know you put a lot of time and thought into your judging, and for that I am always thankful, win or lose. Enjoy your week ~ John
Dietrich Avatar
September 8, 2020 at 5:54 PM
Just skimming through this one again, I think you have changed it now, right? I always like things shorter, so if it's shorter now, all the better!!
Watt Avatar
September 8, 2020 at 6:00 PM
Yes, I made it shorter and fixed some rhymes to adhere better to the contest criteria. Thanks for noticing, my friend.
Proxenos Avatar
September 5, 2020 at 1:17 AM
Quite a challenge to try this style of poetry John, you have written a clever gem here, but I would have to read a few more to be confident I can perhaps give it a shot. Well penned my friend and best wishes for the contest. blessings and hugs, Jennifer.
Watt Avatar
September 8, 2020 at 5:59 PM
I am always one to encourage my friends to try the contests that seem 'out of reach'. I go through that phase with almost every contest, and every time when I try my hand at it I am surprised that it is doable. Read a couple more if that helps, but do try it Jenn. Your gifts will rise to the occasion. Hugs ~ John
Dietrich Avatar
September 4, 2020 at 1:45 PM
wow, this is so amazing, John. If it does not nab number one spot, I'll be surprised. You put so much work into this and I wonder, did seeing that 5 poem of mine a while back inspire you to try Nina's form with this? Wish You had more new poetry for me to view. I got nothing from hypnotherapy but maybe it will "take" eventually. Who knows!
Watt Avatar
September 4, 2020 at 2:46 PM
Hi, my friend! A soupmail in the works to answer your question...
Faulkner Avatar
September 3, 2020 at 9:03 AM
How clever this is! I didn't even realize the letter A was omitted, which is is a testament to your skill. The half eleven is a fun form to write in, I've tried it a couple of times. I like the Nine muses the best, but they are all excellent, should do well in the contest~
Watt Avatar
September 14, 2020 at 4:08 PM
You're welcome and thank you for the recommendation!
Faulkner Avatar
September 3, 2020 at 12:44 PM
If you want to read one, it's 'The Witches of Halloween', thanks for your interest!
Watt Avatar
September 3, 2020 at 10:24 AM
Michelle, that's the highest compliment, to know that it didn't seem stilted or awkward without using any A's. I couldn't find any useful synonyms for 'syllable', 'star' or 'year' so I feel like I had to detour quite a bit to get those lines to behave. Let me know which of your poems are Half-Elevens and I will be happy to read them!
Deepa Avatar
September 3, 2020 at 8:44 AM
Outstanding piece dear John sir:-) I enjoyed the rhyme in your Lipogram.:-) A new form learnt through your poem.Will try one sometime soon. Thankyou for teaching beginner's like me:-). Best wishes for you in the contest. Have a wonderful day.Take care.Warm regards.
Watt Avatar
September 3, 2020 at 10:30 AM
Thank you for your encouraging words, Deepa. It is always nice to hear from you. I hope you do give this form a try. I find that the more challenges we take on, the better poets we become. I have really grown in my time at Soup because of that. Enjoy your day ~ John
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