Richard Lamoureux Poet Monorhyme

Could Have Been a Perfect Day

Lips wet with dew kissed my sad face
Knowing eyes covered in black lace
A soul departs without a trace 
Returns to grace, returns to grace

I hold her hand as we both pray
Beneath a tree as it's bows sway
If not for death a perfect day
He went away, he went away

I question yet no answers come
All turn to dust when life is done
I'm so lost here with everyone
I want to run, I want to run

Monotetra Contest

Third poem I wrote I was a little unclear on the rules,
I hope I got it right with this one.

One of my close friends Died at 18 in a motorcycle accident.
I dedicate this one to Hosea Cardos.

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Karen Anglesey July 11, 2013 at 6:33 PM The loss and love so deeply felt. The excellent title and poetry form suits the lines perfectly. Peaceful feeling under the tree, what could have otherwise been a perfect day. Congratulations on your win :) Richard Lamoureux July 11, 2013 at 6:51 PM Thanks Karen.

Audrey Haick July 10, 2013 at 9:01 PM Well done, Richard.I feel the pain yet there's hope within. So sorry about your friend, Hosea.... RIP. Congratulations! Richard Lamoureux July 11, 2013 at 6:09 AM Yes there is hope. Thanks

Poet Destroyer A July 9, 2013 at 9:38 PM Congrats In Kim's "Monotetra" contest....take care...LINDA Richard Lamoureux July 10, 2013 at 7:12 AM Thanks Linda.

Isaiah Zerbst July 9, 2013 at 2:55 PM A great poem to reread and think about for a while. Some great truths lie hidden among these verses. My time was well rewarded. Richard Lamoureux July 9, 2013 at 5:40 PM Thanks Isaiah.

Joyce Johnson July 9, 2013 at 11:46 AM A lovely dedication for your friend and a great win. Love, Joyce Richard Lamoureux July 9, 2013 at 5:41 PM Thanks Joyce

Kim Merryman July 9, 2013 at 11:36 AM Richard, a heartfelt, emotional piece. Well done! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim Richard Lamoureux July 10, 2013 at 8:07 AM Thanks Kim

Debbie Guzzi July 9, 2013 at 11:22 AM Danger things those motorcycles :( Congrad's on your win. Light & Love Richard Lamoureux July 10, 2013 at 8:07 AM Thanks Debbie

Debbie Knapp June 26, 2013 at 6:56 PM Sad but nice of you to write this for your friend. Richard Lamoureux June 26, 2013 at 8:39 PM Thanks Debbie

Cecilia Macfarlane June 26, 2013 at 11:18 AM Such a tragedy dying so young, sorry you had to go through that at such a young age Rick. Touching tribute to your friend. Hugs Richard Lamoureux June 26, 2013 at 8:41 PM Yes it was, he had such promise, spoke three languages great personality very intelligent. It was tough for all his friends and family.

Poet Tacito June 25, 2013 at 7:20 AM Huge respect to you for this personal piece. Richard Lamoureux June 25, 2013 at 7:26 AM Thanks Drake

Eileen Manassian June 24, 2013 at 5:44 PM Death...be not proud though some have called thee mighty and dreadful...One short sleep past...we wake eternally...Death thou shalt die. The first and last lines of one of my favorite poems by John Donne. Give it a read...it comforts me. Lovely poem...birthed from painful memories.... Richard Lamoureux June 25, 2013 at 7:24 AM Very appropriate and meaningful scripture. Thanks

Demetrios Trifiatis June 24, 2013 at 10:08 AM What a dramatic day for Man, what a glorious day for the soul! Beautiful poem, only those of us who have been through such an experience may understand what you lived! A worthy monument for your friend it is this creation of yours! Richard Lamoureux June 25, 2013 at 7:23 AM Thanks so much Demetrios, I always appreciate your kind words and visits.

Colleen Bono June 24, 2013 at 10:08 AM sounds good here to.Still pretty sick and might have to go in for iv antibiotics.2 years ago I was in for 62 days.Trying to stay strong.Colleen Richard Lamoureux June 25, 2013 at 7:26 AM You remain in my prayers Colleen. Today is a good day to take a step towards feeling better. Hugs Rick

April Gabriella June 23, 2013 at 6:13 PM Lovely poem. The emotion is definitely there. Great job! Richard Lamoureux June 23, 2013 at 6:28 PM Thanks April