Cotton Candy Castles

Cotton candy castles

When you look closely at an idea,
it has no weight.
The holes seem to weigh
more than the thought itself
The idea can never happen.
It can never be real.
It is too preposterous,
too stupid.
The light is shined into
the cavity of a brain, and
the ideas melt away like
bits of spun sugar melting
in your mouth. Small, Insignificant
Fluff never to be seen again.
You try to save the fluff.
Keep it from the light.
But no matter how 
the idea hides, it cannot
escape the scrutiny of the
world. The idea flees
from the light, and 
collides with another
idea fleeing the same fate.
The holes from one idea
fill in the holes of the other.
The idea grows 
Bigger, and collides
with more ideas. Their
holes gaining more and
more weight until
they are what the world calls
concrete.
Now the idea is something
to be reckoned with.
The idea could change the
world. It could bring an
alternate eternity
into life. The idea could
do ANYTHING.
It continues to grow
little spun fibers of
fluff gathering speed,
gathering power, gathering
weight.
Until the weight is too
much to hold the holes
together, and the idea
is scattered, like fluff
in the wind. The weight
of the wholes, is more than
the weight of the idea.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Gauthier Avatar
May 13, 2020 at 12:22 PM
Awesome poem, Heather. A FAVE for me. I love how the airiness is sustained through your poem. Well penned.
Watt Avatar
May 1, 2020 at 5:58 PM
Oh, I just noticed this was the first poem you posted at PS back in 2013. You must have been pretty young. Great first post! ~ John
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May 1, 2020 at 6:31 PM
Haha! I was 14 at the time, so just starting out in High School. :) It is hard to believe that I have been part of the poetry soup community for seven years now! :)
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May 1, 2020 at 5:54 PM
Hi Heather, I just love your imagination in this poem about ideas and the weight they contain. I studied semiconductor electronics in college (during the Jefferson administration, I believe) where electrical current is described as the flow of holes (being the space where an electron is missing). So, your poem is very electric (from a semiconductor's point of view). From my point of view it is magical and transcendent. Keep writing, poetess! ~ John
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May 1, 2020 at 6:33 PM
I like that view on it! I took quantum chemistry last semester and we had a whole unit on semiconductors and I hadn't made the connection at the time, but going back and reading it is interesting to see my poem from that perspective!
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March 8, 2014 at 2:52 PM
† Sounds As They The Husbandmen Thinking Hey, If We Kill 'The Son His Heir,' Then, Everything Will Be Ours ? Smile, Some Really BIG Holes Amid That Thinking....But, If Light Can Swallow Hypotheticals Black Hole Then, Imagine, What Dreams May Come ? Dig The 'Cotton Candy Castles' ˜ My Love, Always, John
Johnson Avatar
March 5, 2014 at 7:49 AM
This poem epitimizes mass confusion. A very intriguing write Heather. Peace. :)
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March 5, 2014 at 3:32 AM
Beautyful and attractive poem. I like the image of idea which becomes heavier and heavier until it becomes concrete. We need poems like this which make us thinking more ideas!
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March 4, 2014 at 12:52 PM
Cotton Candy Castles Such philosophical insight !, that touches upon all of human experience and sums up the journey of woman’s / mans adventures, the memories of their life time – cotton candy blown by the cold winds of fate and passing time . A very nice write Heather, as I am sure ( not having read any yet ) most or all of your others are . Bill. ( B. J. “A” 2 )
Williams Avatar
March 4, 2014 at 12:10 PM
I love this poem cotton candy Castles. There are some very good ideas out there. Some get off the ground and some don't but they are still good. Sometimes the craziest ideas turn out to be the best idea in the making. Very good write. Love it!!!!!!!
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March 4, 2014 at 12:08 PM
I gave this a seven because I understand it very nice and creative try checking out my later works maybe avoid earlier ones but I think you'll understand mine too, enjoy. Very nice it made me think twice alot!
Thomson Avatar
March 4, 2014 at 12:04 PM
Really nice concept and examination of the mass potential of the invisible.
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August 11, 2013 at 12:27 AM
My hearty congratulations on your win my dear friend Heather. Thank you so much as well for sharing your excellent write. Have a grace-filled wkend! Love lots and big hugs, Leonora
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August 9, 2013 at 7:27 PM
A nice win Heather..... SKAT
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August 8, 2013 at 9:17 PM
Heather, CONGRATULATIONS!!! With your awesome good poem' in Nathan's contest... XOX Linda
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August 8, 2013 at 8:15 PM
awesome win. NATE
Jones Avatar
June 24, 2013 at 6:45 PM
The power of the mind is a might thing when we let loose our imaginations and dreams.great poem..congratulations
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June 20, 2013 at 3:31 PM
Heather congratulations on your excellent win. I look forward in reading more of your work. Welcome to SP. warm Smiles, Connie
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June 20, 2013 at 1:39 PM
Hi Heather, ;-) Congratulations!!! Thank you for entering one of my latest contest. please enjoy all the other winners who took their time in entering the same contest you did. you can find the list on the -Contest Winners: Member area- or you can visit my newest blog called ""from HEART to HEART ..."" stop by if you like. always & forever *LINDA
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June 19, 2013 at 8:27 AM
oh, my !!! This is great Heather, , Stopping by with a nice and sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup fan....... God Bless........... Hugs* SKAT
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June 17, 2013 at 1:29 PM
Hello Heather :) - thanks for your first poem, well written. - Welcome to P-Soup - Have fun with poetry, share your thoughts and words here with us. - Welcome to read some of my poems. (give comment and get back) - Always nice with several new friends. - Good luck with your writing. - Have a great time here at P-Soup. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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June 17, 2013 at 1:15 PM
I like the idea, and the way you say it can never be real Heather, . Dropping in with a nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. My name is Linda; I’m here to invite you on over to my latest contest. You will find the contest page on the top left hand side* please consider my contest* hopefully you find this place to be the comfort zone your writing pen is looking for. If you ever need or want honest feedback on a certain poem let me know. Stop by anytime you like. I’m looking forward in following you and your poetry. Hope to hear from you soon. You will enjoy this community; we are one big happy family. (Drama & Love. LOL) ~ Take Care!! From: your new poet friend Linda
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