Copper

Was there more between us,... than luck?
How long were you buried, in your shallow grave beneath the oak?
And just when I needed to know the secret of hope,
you whispered out good fortune with your burnished breath.

How long were you buried in your shallow grave beneath the oak,
then rising from the shiver of crumbling, copper leaves?
You whispered out good fortune with your burnished breath, 
to lighten the shadows of my grief

Then rising from the shiver of crumbling, copper leaves,
you patiently waited for the perfect moment.
To lighten the shadows of my grief,
you revealed a wizened, tarnished face to me

You patiently waited for the perfect moment.
And just when I needed to know the secret of hope
you revealed a wizened, tarnished face to me
Was there more between us,.... than luck?



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For Rhonda's and Cyndi's Penny Pantoum Contest
(Copper Penny....USA)
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Susan Avatar
October 16, 2012 at 7:39 AM
love the reflective tone to this! a belated congrats on this gem! p.s. thanks for "getting" my puppet wife poem - I don't think a lot of people got the humor, even with it explained.
Macmillan Avatar
September 27, 2012 at 8:38 PM
Carrie, so awesome, so WRENCHED. Touched me on many levels and I am once again dazzled by your craft. Thank you for putting your heart into this... lovely. And sorry for the delay in getting here! Congrats on the win in our contest... hugs, Cyndi
Brown Avatar
September 26, 2012 at 5:22 AM
A belated congratulations on your win in Rhonda and Cyndi's "Penny Pantoums" contest Carrie. Love, Carol
Kendrick Avatar
September 25, 2012 at 3:19 PM
Congrats on your winning work..Sara
Poet Avatar
September 25, 2012 at 11:26 AM
Just awesome Carrie!It's always a delight to read your poetry.Congrats on your win in the contest.
Sweetheart Avatar
September 25, 2012 at 9:50 AM
CONGRATS CARRIE ON A FABULOUS TOP TEN WIN LUV .. EXCELLENT ENTRY.
Gorelick Avatar
September 25, 2012 at 7:26 AM
I have no idea how they judged this contest..this is just wonderful...congrats. BG
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
September 25, 2012 at 1:07 AM
Congratulations Carrie, well done and a well deserved win xx
Kendrick Avatar
September 17, 2012 at 5:53 PM
Congrats on your win..Great work..I enjoyed reading this one..A good topic that you chose on which to write your Pantoum..Sara
Goudreau Avatar
September 17, 2012 at 4:21 PM
A very moving piece of fine art! How talented you are. A pleasure to read you and thank you for sharing! Congratulations on your win! Well deserved my friend!
O'Leary Avatar
September 16, 2012 at 12:44 PM
Very nice pantoum... so intricately woven! Terry
Poet Avatar
September 16, 2012 at 11:48 AM
Beautiful Pantoum here Carrie!Great work!Love it.
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