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Consequence

There is a world out there that not all can see. A world of peace and harmony. There is a wind that blows that not all feel. And the father who's been delt a bad deal. There are clouds that form that not all can touch. And a mothers love can help so much. There is thunder in the heavens that not all can hear. Hold your child close so they will not fear. There is rain that falls where no one can hide. But their are people who have tried. But there will always be stars deep in the sky. Watching your every move so do not lie. In this world we have made alone. We are all responsible for ones own. So take it all in and change your path. So the world of tomorrow won't suffer your wrath.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 9/27/2016 1:35:00 PM
Hi Cory...this is an excellent piece. I moved by your metaphors...think about one's actions today as they'll have dire consequences tomorrow *******(:heers!
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Date: 9/20/2016 1:37:00 PM
Cory F, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Date: 9/19/2016 9:32:00 PM
Cory, Georgie, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :) Drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs **YNR - SKAT
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Date: 9/19/2016 3:54:00 PM
Welcome to Soup, Cory. I am not sure if I made the world alone and many are already on a path that is right for them. This site has many ways to connect to other poets, and the links are an easy way to find poetry to read. I hope you enjoy the site. It has a great deal to offer. There are many resources for both newer and professional poets. The more you visit other poets, the more comments you, in turn, will receive. It takes some time, but soon you will be able to navigate comfortably.
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Cory Forrest
Date: 9/20/2016 12:36:00 PM
Good advice thank you. I Don't know much about poetry, or rather the types of poetry, I am learning. Does free verse remove the labeling of how a poem is written? I could write a second version with less rhyme, I'm guessing it's the latter that keeps the poem from its potential. I really appreciate the feedback.
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/20/2016 8:07:00 AM
Cory :) Have you considered writing a second version of this as free verse... Your reply, the line of "tempo of society" is good! Sometimes, rhyme can capture the full essence of an idea ... and other times rhyme prevents a poem from being able to fully stretch... ;) ... and I don't believe in 'thinking too much :DDD
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Cory Forrest
Date: 9/19/2016 4:17:00 PM
I guess what I was getting at when I say we alone was more directed to those who live in excess, and how it affects the tempo of society. Big change won't happen until all our hearts are open to each other... I know a lot for a little sentence..lol I think too much lol.
Date: 9/19/2016 11:05:00 AM
Good entry with a nice poem. Hope u will enjoy PS very much.Very meaningful & deep write. Keep on writing..........//:) with love
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Date: 9/19/2016 6:36:00 AM
better take it then ;)) loved it thank you.
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Date: 9/19/2016 5:33:00 AM
An advisory through a beautiful poem ... Excellent ...
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