Richard Lamoureux Poet Rhyme

Confessional

"Hail Mary full of grace"
These words you demand of me
as I sit here in this dark box
confessing 
crying
talking to your shadow
Eyes that never meet
I am untouched by your hand

You say in this place 
my secrets are safe
and me I wish to be set free
yet there is no resolution
Can't you see
This is a frigid place
an impersonal cold box
with walls that close in
I feel no relief from my sin
You ask me to begin

"Forgive me father
for I have sinned"
I have had impure thoughts
I have done things in the dark
The beast has left its mark

You sit there
do you really understand
You speak softly and demand
Tell me more
Tell me more

Why do you sit there
in the dark
separated from me
Is it somehow easier to see
I'm sorry it makes no sense
the wall becomes a fence
throwing off my internal balance
I'd feel better sitting across from you
away from this palace

In the end we are both just men
we will surely sin again
Hail Marys won't be nearly enough
only God can forgive our stuff
I choose to talk directly to Him
through Jesus I can begin
His blood spilled for my sin

That's how I know deep within
Jesus sweet Jesus 
shows me how to begin
I confess to Him
not mother Mary
or some man in a robe
They can't set me free
So I walk away 
unforgiven by man
yet gifted eternity!

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Kim Rodrigues September 7, 2021 at 4:32 AM Excellent! My mom once said, “I don’t know why we have to confess our sins to a priest.” I told her the truth from the bible: There is only one mediator between man and God, Jesus Christ. I have been so far removed from the box that I forgot that people still do that. Praying together among brothers and sisters in Christ are so much more beautiful, the touch of love in hands, hugs, and voice. A fave, my friend! Thank you for telling me about this one.

Eric Ashford August 12, 2019 at 3:56 PM Hi Richard this is a strong poem and makes lots of great thoughts. My (often unsolicited advice), is that sometimes less is more. I would also not use an exclamation mark at the end. Otherwise this is a winner!

Vladislav Raven November 25, 2018 at 6:41 PM Hi Richard, this is such a creative, excellent write my friend. This is such an interesting piece. From start to end I was engrossed in your words. I am a strange Catholic Richard. I love and trust my god but not my church. I don't like to blindly follow. It is a pleasure and honour to be reading your words Richard. Have a wonderful Monday. Your friend always....Mike.

Len Gasun December 25, 2017 at 12:15 AM This is truly amazing! Belated congratulations for a well-deserved great win, my dear poet-friend. Thank you so much for sharing, your lovely visit on my old Christmas poem and your greetings. Merry Christmas to you and your family too. God bless you always! Hugs. Richard Lamoureux December 25, 2017 at 8:19 AM Thanks again Galen.:0)

Geoffrey Brewer December 2, 2017 at 3:09 AM Thoughtful, honest, perceptive and well constucted, in a form that enhances the power of the message. I am impressed and satisfied. Richard Lamoureux December 2, 2017 at 8:23 AM What a nice thing to say Geoffrey. I appreciate your visit.

Rhoda Tripp November 25, 2017 at 7:07 PM I'm a recovering Catholic attending C.A. classes (kidding, no offense) but I could totally relate! Richard Lamoureux November 26, 2017 at 11:21 AM Ha ha, none taken.

Ralph Sergi October 1, 2017 at 5:33 PM Hi Richard: a great and very insightful poem. To have reached this age, I no longer feel as guilty and I'm the one who attends church in my family and I don't point fingers. I believe that faith is a great healer.

Rick Eichelberg September 25, 2017 at 5:47 PM Wow! As a Catholic, that is a very profound poem, Richard, and I can easily understand why it won. I have GOT to read more of your work. Seriously, well done.

Anna Hopper September 2, 2017 at 8:32 AM PHENOMENAL Richard Lamoureux September 2, 2017 at 8:35 AM Thanks Anna, much appreciated.

Freddie Robinson Jr. August 12, 2017 at 10:40 AM Very profound poem, Richard. Your words ring universal true. Great poem. Love and joy.

John Fleming August 6, 2017 at 5:38 PM Religion was designed in the minds of men - not in the mind of God! Great poem, Richard...impressed! My very best regards. :) john

Afzal Nusker August 5, 2017 at 12:31 PM Your faith & belief shines through this crystal clear poem. Congrats on your win, Richard.

Joanna Daniel August 5, 2017 at 12:19 AM This is a good way to show how such confessions to men don't give forgiveness, why tell them when we can talk directly to our God? Beautiful poem, Richard, I see it has won! Congratulations:)

Michael Tor August 3, 2017 at 11:07 PM Wow great truth spoken here. Read by a former Catholic I can relate. Love the Catholic people but dislike the religion. You have spoken the truth here Richard. I for one agree... Wonderful write my friend. Richard Lamoureux August 4, 2017 at 9:17 AM I too know many amazing, loving and thoughtful Catholic people. I just have trouble wrapping my mind and heart around some of the tenants of their beliefs and traditions. Thanks for commenting.

Eileen Manassian August 1, 2017 at 2:55 PM I was so sure that I had commented on this outstanding poem, Richard. Perhaps there was a glitch on my phone or something. Of course, you know that I share your beliefs completely. "For there is no other name under heaven given to man by which He can be saved!" Exceptional write....and congrats, dear. Richard Lamoureux August 4, 2017 at 9:19 AM To be honest I seem to remember responding to a comment from you on this piece. Thanks and a big hug for coming back.

Rob Carmack July 31, 2017 at 4:27 PM Awesome Richard, only Christ. He is all we need and he is all that we have. Congrats on taking first place. Richard Lamoureux August 4, 2017 at 9:13 AM Amen to that Rob. Thanks for commenting.

Dan Cwiak July 31, 2017 at 11:05 AM Richard, this is nicely done and I will play "devil's advocate" in reminding you that Jesus gave the power to forgive to His apostles. No, you don't need to hide in a box to confess...just ask him to sit next to you for a few minutes. If you told him how you feel with the poem above, I am sure your view would change. I love the way you worked this out, but perhaps differ on the experience. Congratulations on the win. Richard Lamoureux August 4, 2017 at 9:11 AM Hi Dan, to fully appreciate the verse you quoted read the preceding verses where Jesus gifted them the Holy Spirit. Two scriptures to ponder, john 1:19 and James 5:16. Thanks for a intelligent and peaceful response.

Kim Rodrigues July 31, 2017 at 10:35 AM The bible says that there is only one mediator between man and God and that is Jesus. Nicely done & Congrats! Richard Lamoureux July 31, 2017 at 10:54 AM Amen, thanks for commenting.

Kai Michael Neumann July 31, 2017 at 3:07 AM Hi again. Someone also pointed out that the spelling should be its mark. I am not big on perfectionism and so be it. Congratulations again, Kai Richard Lamoureux July 31, 2017 at 10:57 AM I corrected its, thanks for catching it. Yes fridged was intentional. May I ask what forum was my piece being discussed in? I am always happy to learn from others.

Kai Michael Neumann July 31, 2017 at 3:05 AM Congratulations on your win. This is an out of the box (pun) entry and I obviously love it. There has been a comment on you using 'fridged' instead of possibly 'frigid'. I like it the way it is and thought it was intentional as in 'in a fridge' in the cold box and very original therefore. Many wishes, Kai

Lin Lane July 30, 2017 at 6:07 PM Rick, I am so delighted to see this one in first place. Well done on passing along this valuable information. Richard Lamoureux July 30, 2017 at 6:32 PM Thanks Lin.:0)

Gregory Richard Barden July 30, 2017 at 4:01 PM So very well-stated, Richard, and a struggle many of us have gone through ... for me the laws added by the Catholic church in the (many) years following the teachings of Christ had little to do with his original message, if any, and I began to abandon them in my early teens, as the Word stated clearly that there should be NO ONE between me and My Father in Heaven. We must each find our own way, but I relate to your wonderful poem. Congrats on well-deserved first place! Richard Lamoureux July 30, 2017 at 6:35 PM Well said Greg, thanks for adding your thoughts.

Janis Medders Tobechi July 30, 2017 at 3:11 PM Well written Richard. Deep thoughts and obvious that you found the one who truly forgives. Congratulations on your first place win. Richard Lamoureux July 30, 2017 at 6:38 PM Thanks Janis.

John Hamilton July 30, 2017 at 12:43 PM Great write Rick, congrats on a first place win! Richard Lamoureux July 30, 2017 at 6:37 PM Thanks john.

Andrea Dietrich July 25, 2017 at 6:15 PM oh good heavens. Ignore the soupmail I just sent you. My comments were not going through when I first sent them, but suddenly they have both appeared when I returned here for a third try!

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