Compartmentalization

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Title: Compartmentalization

Sponsor: Edward Ibeh

date 8/02/23

My dear, hear me and not my perceived guilt
For my distancing quiet you demean
It is not a wall but a guard I built
To keep my darker heart in quarantine
A bitter thorn in a twisted ravine
If some midnights produce a muzzled roar
Escaping the planks of my placid floor
Allow me this one secret to withhold
It is for our love I don't show you more
These stones too crushing to leave uncontrolled

08/02/23

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John Watt

Date: 8/18/2023 10:18:00 PM

Michelle, you have a dazzling talent for telling a complex story within a compact space. I study your works to learn how it can be done and I readily admit your writing has had a positive influence upon my own. The power of your word pairing and phrasing is mind-blowing. "keep my darker heart in quarantine", "These stones too crushing to leave uncontrolled", "A bitter thorn in a twisted ravine"... all awesome. The message is so incredible in a psychological, yet uplifting and loving way. And all within the restrictive constraints of a Dizain format! Another Fav for me.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 8/24/2023 8:51:00 PM

I actually was not too sure of this one, was considering removing it so it cheers me up that you enjoyed it, and I hope you have some new poems soon for me to enjoy!