Coming To Senses

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‘Echoing vacant sound’

‘Grinding sand-grains into water’

I am indebted to Vijay Pandit  for the above metaphors he coined.

Coming to Senses

Ten thousand fathoms deep of immeasurable pain in hand

Tim raises the anchor entwined with callus and sea shells

Back breaking ardour sends blisters straight to the heart

	Touches untouchable spikes from the corals

His tiny coracle was meant to navigate shallow waters

He had been a bog snorkeler wrestling mud for sheer joy

Yet his mask had come off and revealed a grimy persona

	Skin’s slipping adhesions loosen the grip

Where dolphins had sung he echoes vacant sound’s void

Hoarse silence suffocates dreams and screams deep inside

A pantomime on the parchment of mute cacophony’s yield

	Ear drums beating retreat into uninhabited mirrors

He tastes tentacles of an ink dried creature folds waxen paper

Smacks tongue and flavours cannot discern tears from dribble

Congealed on his palate ingesting nothingness’ rancid relish

        Buds meant to savour reveal nowhere to save

Cataracts descend from within ragged blindfolded drought

As he begins to deliver catharsis by grinding sand into tears

Eyes on red alert icicles hanging from lids he melts down

	Sees what he must brace without delusions of fancy

Five senses mingle with reason likes cogs in a rusty wheel of life

Unshackled emotions smudge duplicity of sorrow and freedom

Eventually Tim manages to let go of his doldrums’ illusion

	Spliced by his anchor lies the journey of his ultimate soul

26th May 2019

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 5/26/2019 7:43:00 AM
You are so kind my friend..I am thrilled that you liked the metaphors. I must say though, your poem is totally original..created by your skilled pen and stands on its own merit. Tim's journey through the five senses kept me going from start to finish. Well done, Kai.
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