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Coming Of Age, The Rite

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^{Prime #'s 2, 3, 5, 7, 11, 13, 17, 19}

^{Any combination of a prime number syllable count may be used. The line breaks serve as punctuation and no caps used, unless it is called for. Any topic which lends itself to a philosophical statement is suitable plus a philosophical statement. prime numbers: Maximum of 19 syllables per line. Mindset: For this contest, include a positive slant in the philosophical component of your Suzette Prime and is a Syllabic Verse and therefore, it does not include rhyme or meter. Image Teepee Collage by Anaya. Pinecrest.com pin by Nonoska Ayala /Native American Paintings.}

Poetry Should Be Felt Poetry Contest

Sponsored by Suzette Richards

Second Place

^{Coming of age is a rite amongst Cree people. Mother Earth’s spiritual relationship is among all living things.}



a tender voice recites, muse’s lyrics flow                                                                                                
non-believers have poisoned Earth Mother's waterways    
She unleashes winds blown hotter and dryer                     
perennial white blossoms swoon midst zephyrs 
dangle from sterling chaste trees
twisted maple bark echo braids sacred hair unscathed    
gold filters branches
thousand-year rooted Algonquin memories 
elders and granddaughters amble amongst crackling twigs 
streams pristine align to augur a promising path
within a bison pelt tepee awaits the knowledge keepers embrace
fire and smoke dense and opaque
evoking a bittersweet melancholy
broadleaves tremble breathe and sway
hymn chants of traditional wisdom expel 
severed is the braid as is the child from the woman
her nascent efflorescence 
transition is significant as we are wedded 
and bound to nature’s perennial sentient
let the path before us grow wider and brighter for future generations

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Suzette Richards

Date: 7/8/2024 12:00:00 AM

Congratulations on your 2nd place win, Anaya. I was enthralled by this tale and the masterful weaving of the nature component as the timeline of the rite unfolded. We cannot ignore Man’s thoughtless actions and the consequences on our natural environment. Your closing line inspires hope and many of us will echo this wish for the future. Suzette

I Am Anaya
Date: 7/8/2024 9:35:00 AM

I am quite honored. Suzette it was what I had in mind, as the youth reads her lines during her ceremony, she encourages us to be stewards of Mother Earth. Thank you for challenging us with such amazing contests!

Tom Woody

Date: 7/6/2024 5:07:00 PM

This was quite intense. Interesting pov presented. Non-believers can certainly include professed Christians (not all) the industrial barons of the earth. Congrats on your placement. I done felt it!

I Am Anaya
Date: 7/7/2024 7:24:00 PM

Thank you, Tom, you're quite intense :) "We are the stewards of the Earth" huge part of the Native knowledge keepers. to feel poetry, it's what we want. xo

Suzette Richards

Date: 7/6/2024 5:01:00 AM

Congratulations on your 2nd place win, Anaya. Please see my notes below.

I Am Anaya
Date: 7/7/2024 7:17:00 PM

Thank you, Suzette I am thrilled with the placement, such an honor! xo

Suzette Richards

Date: 7/6/2024 2:17:00 AM

I have sent you soup mail, Anaya, with the feedback as I keep getting Error 500 on your page when tried to access It via my laptop. It has happened before (perhaps due to the many images on you pages - it slows it down to open them?) :)

I Am Anaya
Date: 7/7/2024 7:16:00 PM

I think so too, Suzette. Officially back, I will fix the images from 3 to 1.5? . Thank you for letting me know.

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 7/5/2024 5:55:00 PM

Congratulations on your brilliant win! A great poem with excellent images! Best wishes ~ Mala

I Am Anaya
Date: 7/7/2024 7:15:00 PM

Thank you, Mala I am thrilled to be honored with a top win. xo ~Anaya

Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 7/5/2024 12:23:00 AM

Congrats on your top win!! great write! must learn this format! very interesting!

I Am Anaya
Date: 7/7/2024 7:14:00 PM

Thank you Krish, I'm thrilled! xo

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/25/2024 8:02:00 PM

Wonderful imagery. I don't know why my mind can't grasp this form. To try myself

I Am Anaya
Date: 6/25/2024 8:25:00 PM

Thank you. You'll do it, Keep it positive. Up and coming anthology as well!

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 6/16/2024 12:50:00 PM

Found it! This is a spiritual write my dear bff. A passage from child to adult, girl to woman. How many transition without thought to past or future. Transcending! hugs :)

I Am Anaya
Date: 6/18/2024 1:42:00 PM

Hey Linda Alice, I'm glad you did. We are both in the same frame of mind, "Strawberry Moon" yesterday, ha. You are right about that, so many overlook the significance and nature's part. Good to see you!

Duke Beaufort

Date: 6/10/2024 4:39:00 PM

Anaya, I love the part about the non-believers. It sums up our current environmental situation completely. The description of the rite is breathtaking and emotional. It's a complete contrast we can learn from. Thanks.

I Am Anaya
Date: 6/10/2024 5:53:00 PM

The Suzette Prime, it was 85 words so yes it sums it up! Duke I really appreciate that you found it emotional that was the goal. Thank you, for your nice review!