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Comatose, Continued

"Are they going to take him off life support?" I heard my middle daughter whisper with burden. In a silenced gasp of terror, I knew I was the subject matter. A doctor's prognosis, in layman's terms: damage irreparable, vegetative state expected. I wrestled with my failed act of will to peal open my eyelids, to motion that I'm still here, living in mystery of the sight around me, but still able to hear, still able to sense. In blurs and slurs, I saw remembrances of faces and places half fabricated, like in dreams. Awake or asleep? --- I knew little difference. I could hear each footstep coming toward me and shuffling away. I could sense someone's presence by a muffled dose of warmth and light. As I heard my pastor praying, I embraced each word with the only hug I could give, one internal, one becoming eternal. As scripture dripped over my thirsty soul, I fervently prayed for each precious visitor, who would lament my impending absence. Like an infant's babbles trapped within, with inutterances now incomprehensible even to myself, I began to fade into an opening of light-flickering glimpses piercing through the doom. As I slipped off into the distance, a redemptive mystery began seeping through, ready to free me from my ebony prison.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




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Date: 11/26/2019 2:35:00 PM
i read both parts of this when you first wrote them but the soup glitch prevented me from commenting... such a powerful piece, heartfelt write my friend... hugs :)
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Juliet Ligon
Date: 11/26/2019 11:40:00 PM
Thanks, Sandra. I appreciate you reading them. Poetic hugs.
Date: 11/21/2019 2:26:00 PM
what a heartbreaking write.. as carol said, very vivid and poetically expressed..
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Juliet Ligon
Date: 11/21/2019 6:06:00 PM
Thanks, Silent One. I cried trying to write this because I was reminded of my dad and what he possibly went through.
Date: 11/20/2019 10:44:00 PM
Wow.. Words are few in my pen to express.. Fantastic poem.. The theme and the chosen words.. Outstanding..
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 11/20/2019 11:27:00 PM
Ohh.. Sorry.. Your own experience.. That is why the words are blazing...
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Juliet Ligon
Date: 11/20/2019 11:15:00 PM
Thanks, Jenish. This is dedicated to my dad. He had a hematomic head injury following a bad fall and instantly slipped into a coma, never waking.

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