Cold Heart

For years she thought his heart would warm up,
and open the door for her world.  It felt like walking
in summer clothes in the north pole,
whenever she touched his chest;
she couldn't sigh, breathe or move.
It's as though he was afraid her hands would
melt his frozen heart,
and unravel his secrets.
Sometimes she joked, and asked him whether
he was an Iceman in his past life,
which he shrugged off,
as hailstorms gathered in his eyes.
Every day the space between them was becoming colder
and wider; she couldn't tell between winter
and summer anymore.....

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 12/19/2016 5:06:00 PM
Hailstones gathered in his eyes, Wow, great imagery Teddy, well done, one of your best I think.
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 12/21/2016 12:57:00 AM
Thank you so much John, for enjoying my piece!! ;-)
Date: 12/13/2016 6:47:00 AM
A work of art, Teddy. I love it. A 7 & a fav.
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Date: 12/15/2016 2:34:00 AM
Wow!!! Thank you so much, Afzal!! *^_^*
Date: 12/1/2016 8:00:00 AM
Hi Teddy,weed# This is sad and beautifully written. The imagery is good. Congratulations on your fine win.It was deserved:-) Alexis
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 12/2/2016 3:02:00 AM
Hi Alexis. These are some o my rare works, which emanate from my soul.... Thank you so much for your applause, and continuous morale support!! :-)
Date: 12/1/2016 3:50:00 AM
Congrats Teddy!
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 12/2/2016 2:59:00 AM
Thank you so much, Rob!! :-)
Date: 12/1/2016 3:43:00 AM
I agree with Jan ... your imagery and metaphor are lovely ...it is here that poetry resides ... not in narratives ... very nice ... well deserved win ... congratulations ...
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Date: 12/2/2016 2:56:00 AM
Greetings, Probir. Thank you so much for your kind applause, and continuous morale support!! :-)
Date: 11/30/2016 5:54:00 PM
such powerful imagery Teddy "Every day the space between them was becoming colder and wider; she couldn't tell between winter and summer anymore....." oh I love these lines! Congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 12/2/2016 2:06:00 AM
Hi Jan. Sorry, Florence' reply jumped. I'm glad those lines grabbed your emotions.... Thank you for your warm applause!! *^_^*
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 12/1/2016 8:03:00 AM
Thank you for reading and enjoying my piece, FJ!! *^_^* I'm glad to hear from you again!! ;-)
Date: 11/30/2016 5:06:00 PM
Congratulations Teddy in the placement of the contest.
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 12/1/2016 7:59:00 AM
Thank you so much for your applause, Nayda!! *^_^* It was an awesome contest!! ;-)
Date: 11/29/2016 8:48:00 AM
Great poem teddy liked it very much x
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Date: 12/1/2016 7:57:00 AM
Thank you, Wendy!! *^_^*
Date: 11/29/2016 5:45:00 AM
A powerful and lyrical story, Teddy.
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Date: 12/1/2016 7:56:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comment, Doug!! :-)
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