Coffers

Gluttons, paupers, tis not thee I address, Rather ye men, middle income meager. Dames hast thine coffers slightly beleaguered? Garments bejeweled, appetites sated? Vultures dine thy muscles of toils weary. Lazy bones remain roadside, pauper's soup. Wages earned, eggs income, gathered hen coop, Through petty tasks, worthlessness abated. Gentlemen, tis advice long awaited. Find ye equal love, damsels of mind fair. If thee seek only fair face, silky hair, Coffers of paupers surely tis fated. Hasten, young men, to thy ladies true worth. For prosperity not, befell thy birth.

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Janice Canerdy

Date: 12/23/2017 1:29:00 AM

Very creative piece, Rhoda! Janice

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/23/2017 1:45:00 AM

Thank you, Janice. Much appreciated.

Edward Mccall

Date: 12/21/2017 3:30:00 PM

So artfully and skillfully done. Applause, Applause M'Lady fair. T'was a joy to partake of so fine a literary delicacy.

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/21/2017 5:48:00 PM

Harken! Tis M'Lord fine that hast found favor in works, mine! I do cherish thy compliments kind. (damn...and it simply doth rhyme!)

Paul Callus

Date: 12/21/2017 9:39:00 AM

Even in this Canzone your creativity shines, Rhoda...so does your advice! ~ Wishing you a very merry Christmas! // paul

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/21/2017 10:43:00 AM

Thank you so much, Paul. You have been so kind to me. A very merry Christmas to you and yours as well. Hugs

Pipping Stars

Date: 12/21/2017 6:29:00 AM

oh our goodness ... what is this ... you just touched me ... hey ... that felt really good ... now ... just tell me when we can open our eyes ... hard to key the words now ... your big word knowledge has been recognized ... now ... how personal could we be in this box ... you have already brushed against my soul ... now ... this being noted ... where can we set up a time for another date ... we would like to set something up ... next time we will bring a net and jar and capture you ... next time

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/21/2017 10:42:00 AM

Truly beautiful, Molly. You have me intrigued. I'll visit your account when I have time.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/20/2017 1:20:00 PM

Rhoda, indeed this is quite Victorianesque!! (hope that is a word). I enjoyed seeing your rhyme scheme employed in this form. I don't think I've done one of the before!) GREAT advice too.

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/21/2017 10:39:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea. Do try the form. Just make sure you choose a word that is easy to rhyme for the end of lines "c". Don't choose the word "soup". Lol. I have to work on that line. Lol

CayCay Jennings

Date: 12/20/2017 12:40:00 PM

I loveth how you talketh. Very, very well done and oh, wasn't it fun? Seriously, I get in moods when I talk, I want to say old English, but you say Victorian? Either way I need a nap. I think you successfully pulled off and delivered the 'speak' on point with your theme. I applaud. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/21/2017 10:37:00 AM

Thank you, CayCay. Yes. You're right. It's Old English and I swear I've lived a previous life in those days as I too get in moods where it's all I speak and I have no idea where it comes from. I've never studied it. Lol

Lu Loo

Date: 12/20/2017 11:17:00 AM

love the form! great poem really enjoyed it! :)-luloo

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/21/2017 10:35:00 AM

Thank you very much, Luloo

James Inman

Date: 12/20/2017 8:28:00 AM

Great use of language, very seasonal in it's tone. The message is clear, not all value comes in coinage or a pretty face.

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/20/2017 6:47:00 PM

Thank you, James. I appreciate your kindness and supportive words.

James Swartz

Date: 12/20/2017 8:03:00 AM

You got talent Rhoda! You experiment and it pays off everything's every time. You made this one look simple.

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/20/2017 6:46:00 PM

Thank you, James. It's not too difficult a form if you choose a word that has a plethora of rhymes to end your first "c" line, otherwise you're sunk. I hate my "coop" line and will revise later. Thanks for stopping in. Appreciated your support.