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Clutter

cluttered
like a lawn
on a blustery
autumn day
these thoughts
scattered about
in my mind

my pen
like a rake
can't corral them
to make any sense

so they rest
momentarily
before being aloft
in a spiral
of winded breaths
landing wherever
they may

just waiting
to be gathered
into neat little piles
somewhere again

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Ann Foster

Date: 2/17/2020 4:17:00 PM

This was lovely. Ann

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/18/2020 9:19:00 AM

Thank you so much Ann... hugs

Chris Green

Date: 2/17/2020 10:27:00 AM

Though I feel this should have taken a top spot, congrats on your place in this contest. All of your poetry is a winner to me.

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/18/2020 9:18:00 AM

Thank you so much...it was just a scribble but I liked the metaphor in it so I entered it... hugs

Gershon Wolf

Date: 2/15/2020 9:56:00 PM

Well-done. Love the extended metaphor. They call this 'poetry,' methinks. :) Gershon

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/16/2020 5:07:00 PM

Thank you so very much Gershon life has been busy... hugs

Juliet Ligon

Date: 2/15/2020 3:19:00 PM

Nice metaphor.

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/16/2020 5:06:00 PM

thank you so very much Juliet :) hugs

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 2/13/2020 6:44:00 PM

Hello Sandra … I guess many of our PC's need a good clean out of unwanted documents etc. too. That is clutter and also needs a spring clean. Very good verse that certainly had me thinking about my own clutter - thank you Sandra - Lindsay

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/13/2020 8:15:00 PM

Thank you Linsay… luckily I have a brand new uncluttered computer...but my mind is cluttered, as is my bus with all leftover winter garments the kids leave behind and all the paperwork they keep giving me, I feel like I have an office on wheels and no filing space... :(

John Watt

Date: 2/13/2020 4:21:00 PM

Sandra, your pen did a very nice job of corralling thoughts for this word painting. Excellent ~ John

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/13/2020 8:13:00 PM

Thank you so much John... hugs

Chris Green

Date: 2/13/2020 10:31:00 AM

They way you use words to paint with is amazing to me. This was fantastic, I could see this and understand where it was coming from. Beautifully done Sandy.

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/13/2020 8:12:00 PM

Thank you so much for such a kind comment Chris..it certainly brought a smile on a dreary evening... hugs

Quoth Theraven

Date: 2/13/2020 9:18:00 AM

Sandra, A totally satisfying analogy for the state of clutter in this poem. It's time for Spring cleaning with deliberation and meditation for many of us. I may need to borrow your rake. -Richard

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/13/2020 8:11:00 PM

Thank you so much Richard... always willing to lend a rake to a friend... hugs

Vijay Pandit

Date: 2/13/2020 6:42:00 AM

This is awesome my friend-- every word captivates--beautifully done, Sandy.

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/13/2020 8:11:00 PM

Thank you so much Vijay...I can't find enough time to write and read these days... schedules been too hectic to even think when I do find a spare moment... hugs