Trina Layne Poet Light Verse

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Premiere Contest - I Choose to Dwell in the Clouds

Sponsor: Tom Woody

Judged: 15th March, 2025

1st Place 

 

Clouds and Candy Raindrops

as a child, 
I perceived
the wonderment 
of Clouds. 

and elders 
likewise contemplated 

the curious celebrity of them

the solemnity of shape-shifting skyships

their charity of rain:
	encouraging fruit 
	greening hills
	irrigating joys
keeping 
watch 
around the earth 
in as enviable 
a perch 
as the risen sun 
or mystic moon 
that guides tides.

sun runs
apace 
moon whisks 
its baton away
but Clouds 
stay high,
perpetual
imprints 
covering Space and Time.
Could 
Clouds 
be God's eyes?

 
      ***

when I was
-abecedarian-
counting from one to three,
I licked my lips 
at Clouds 
reckoning 
I'd catch them 
like docile butterflies,
and discern the flavors of miracle floss: 
	                                                must be rose-white sugar
	                                                some barley flour
	                                                lamb's fleece and goose feathers
the elders, lofty and wise, 
disparaged my foolish games.
I tugged 
on the edge of their mountainous faces:
	                                                 wispy chins
	                                                 transient strands
	                                                 billowy beards        
closest clouds 
I'd seen 
	Proximal nimbi 
and their dust trail
of ginger, onion, and clove
pulled pork, frizzled cod, light ashtray
lingered...
               I caught 
               those crazy hairs 
               so hard
               candy-coated 
               raindrops 
               fell!

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Darlene De Beaulieu July 31, 2025 at 11:04 AM Hello Trina, I am a cloud watcher. I enjoy watching the clouds. the shapes of them always change shapes, never staying the same. enjoy your day my friewnd. /darlene/ Darlene De Beaulieu August 1, 2025 at 4:52 AM Hello Trina, A warm hello to you. I enjoyed this poem tina. i am making your poem a fav. i will be reading your poetry. Enjoy your day my friend from Canada. /Darlene/ Trina Layne July 31, 2025 at 9:15 PM Nice to meet you, Darlene. A warm hello from Barbados:)

I Am Anaya March 16, 2025 at 2:54 PM I really dig the recipe for good measure. CrAzy compelling poetry. Congratulations on your Trophy, Trina Layne! ~ I Am Anaya Trina Layne March 17, 2025 at 12:27 PM Thank you, Anaya. Congrats to you as well :)

Edward Ibeh March 16, 2025 at 3:00 AM Mxua! This is just too beautiful and so deserving of 1st place, Trina. "Could clouds be God's eyes?" I loved that line. I gotta fave... Trina Layne March 16, 2025 at 7:24 AM Thank you so much :) It's one of my favorites as well.

thriveni c mysore March 15, 2025 at 10:09 PM This is interesting form dear poet, so silken verse.I could hear you recite! beautiful. congratulations on your top win dear friend. three cheers!!! Happy writing. Trina Layne March 16, 2025 at 7:25 AM Thank you! I appreciate your continued encouragement.

Susan Ashley March 15, 2025 at 7:41 PM Dear Trina, your enchanting eloquence stirs my soul deeply. A thoughtful, exceptional, creatively thought-provoking piece. Worthy of deep dives into this artistic verse over and again. Incredible! Congratulations for your shining trophy win in Tom’s esteemed contest. This poem and your golden pen are so very special. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Trina Layne March 16, 2025 at 7:27 AM I'm so happy that you were touched by it. It's autobiographical too in many ways. I was a weird child. Many thanks!

Laura Leiser March 15, 2025 at 5:26 PM Love the stream of consciousness and creative imagery you present in this outstanding poem, Trina! The way it is structured, like a flowing train of clouds, is perfect! Congrats on your well deserved win! :) Trina Layne March 15, 2025 at 6:54 PM Thank you so much, Laura.

Brian Sambourne March 15, 2025 at 4:35 PM Congratulations Trina. I love the creative structural ordering of words, thoughts, images in your fine posting. "I licked my lips at Clouds reckoning I'd catch them" - a fanciful image so childlike + endearing. Imaginative + praiseworthy. Trina Layne March 15, 2025 at 6:55 PM :)