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April 17, 2025

~ Fifth Place ~
Premiere Contest: Happily Discontent
Sponsor: Kai Michael Neumann


 

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Clouds spiral down and curl around to touch me
—not those western drizzle shrouds
baring a soul of misery mizzle
...though I adore a good wallow in sorrow  —no 
these clouds come from yonder bluebird wilds
white cirrus  wispy and whispery  dance around me
I steal one to wear across my shoulders 
like a platinum’s blonde’s faux stole

they come to me like papier-mâché angels —no no
that’s too cliché… and passé   for I’m far beyond
the Godly touch of angels… hmm.. they come to me
like a lover —no too easy …like a heartbreak-er lover!
yah I’ll go with that and get a taboo tattoo of his name

anyway  the clouds  they find me where I stand
dissatisfied with being satisfied
the result of my cool cat face seduction
I wear a crimson bee balm boutonniere 
display it on my plunging V lapel   but
it attracts wasps instead of honey bees; I find
danger brings a secret pleasure to my displeasure

my leopard print pants (red sky colored)
stirs sir knight with his bridled gaze and walking stick
he watches my next move on the chessboard
tries to guess my breezy strategy
my hands behind my head  legs crossed
maybe it’s a white crested ocean I'm floating on
  —or wrestling with—  either way
I’m here to play and paint a displeased scene

watercolors? they’re just transparent hues
applied to my white background
depending on the mood of my mood ring —but
when acrylics bleed it’s harder to see the scene
colors escape their space creating a slurry
of what is where  where is when  when is why
and why don’t know why ..what?! but I know how
blurry lines take on a life of their own
and shapes a new fate from ‘no gesso’ mistakes

I could switch my style to snarly tiger stripes today
and gladly take that horse-headed knight down
that wooden old guard has new orders
he’s suspicious of me  scrutinizes me
but only half as much as I’m used to
his right hand on his monocle 
—the other eye blind

just beyond the reach of his walking stick
I free my torso of its purple grapevine corset
uncinching my fake waisted form   —I muse
if my time as a wastrel was wasted or invested
   oh …the monocle is telescoping me again
I shimmy lose my butterfly wings
slap him as I flap them  and fly away

it’s hard to know if I’m still beautiful
or if I’m just broken
—either way  I embrace the rainy side of the rainbow
happily discontent

Copyright © | Year Posted 2025



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Date: 6/20/2025 2:12:00 PM
such depth in your words, Susan. You beautifully touched on many topics and graciously touched upon brokenness. We all experience brokenness, and your last verse is what I sometimes feel when I'm 'broken.' Thanks for sharing from your heart, Yellow Rose
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Date: 6/28/2025 7:37:00 AM
Dear Sara, first let me say it's wonderful to see you back! You and your talent for beautiful poetry and heartfelt comments have been missed. Please accept my apologies for the delay in responding to your lovely thoughts, this has been an exceptionally busy week, but I'm finally here to visit with poet friends :) I agree with you that "We all experience brokenness".. I'm sorry that we do but I'm reassured that my verse resonated with you and that we are not alone. Thank you for your treasured comments, they are ever appreciated. Will be on your page very soon. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/11/2025 7:42:00 AM
What a jewel you are, my dear soup friend, Ashley; your literary talent is unrivaled! Your wordplay is stunning and fascinating. Such a great piece delves into the intricacies of self-perception, unhappiness, and the interaction of beauty and brokenness. It also explores sentiments of dissatisfaction while honoring individualism and the creative spirit. Words like "whispery," "platinum's blonde," "cliché," and "displeasure" elicit powerful sensory reactions. The fun tone is reflected in terms like "crimson bee balm boutonniere" and "snarly tiger stripes," which combine amusing and serious elements—sending you warm regards.
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Date: 5/18/2025 7:48:00 AM
Dear Lasaad, I'm thrilled to receive your uplifting and amazing comments. Thank you for spending time with my verse and sharing your insights which are treasured. I'm so glad to know that enjoyed the wordplay and imagery. That means a lot to me coming from a poet of your caliber. Warmest wishes, my inspiring poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 4/30/2025 10:30:00 AM
His right hand on his monocle........just beyond the reach of his walking stick....... I free my torso........unclinching my fake waisted form ..... oh....the monocle is telescoping me again. What a pest he is! Oh my Susan you are a poet of note, my dearest friend - what a gem you are, your poetic gift unparalleled! The way you play with words is striking and appealing . Such an excellent write, love it and send all my love to you, my wonderful, soup friend. Blessings and hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 5/1/2025 12:50:00 PM
My dearest Jennifer, sweet poetry sister, your gracious visit and wonderful comments fill me with delight. Indeed, the "monocle" is a pesky pest! lol! Thank you for sharing in this flight of fancy with me. I'm so touched to know you enjoyed this whimsical piece. Your golden presence shines upon my poem and my grateful heart. Warmest wishes, hugs and all my love sent to you, my inspiring poet friend and sweet sis.. ~Susan
Date: 4/22/2025 2:56:00 AM
This poem shows the human side of the effort that goes into being effortlessly charming. I just love, love, love the way you wrote this beauty, showing both sides of the coin, and how life led you to embracing them all. The depth of the language here is surreal, the rhythm is intentionally wonky in the best of ways, and it all ties up in this perfect theme of being happily discontent, your unique poetic voice shining through and through. Wishing you many blessings, Hiba.
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Date: 4/26/2025 10:10:00 AM
Dear Hiba, amazing poet and inspiring friend, I revel in your beautiful response to my poem. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts with me. They are highly valued and held in my deepest appreciation. Your see into the heart and soul of my poem with poetic precision. Your poetry friendship enhances my creative experience here and your shining presence adds luster to my humble verse. I admire and celebrate you for your thoughtful expression in the comment box and for the fruition of exquisite artistry on your poetry pages. Warmest wishes my sweet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 4/21/2025 10:47:00 AM
Amazing, wow- had me through the whole thing. Your gift shows in this, certainly. <3 :)
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Date: 4/26/2025 9:56:00 AM
Dear Paige, soulful poet, thank you for your uplifting response to my poem. So glad to receive beautiful thoughts, my creative friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 4/19/2025 8:01:00 PM
Super creative imagery and whimsical humor mixed into it. Got to the end and yep, you nailed that theme!
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Date: 4/22/2025 10:16:00 AM
Dear Andrea, your comments are a thrill and a pleasure to receive. Thank you for sharing your uplifting thoughts. They made my day! :) Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 4/19/2025 12:44:00 PM
You really crack me up with some of your fanciful expressions (in a good way). Depending on the mood of your mood ring? They're so dang fickle. Switching over to wolfish tiger stripes? Groooowl. And that troublesome monocle! Nice swat slap smack. You do like to have a good time with your pen/keyboard, eh?
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Date: 4/22/2025 10:14:00 AM
Dear Tom.. groooowl.. lol! I do have a good time with my pen/keyboard when verses come to me in the way this poem did! I had fun with the imagery and word play for sure :) Glad I cracked you up, your comments cracked me up too. Thank you my poet friend. Ever grateful for your insightful presence. Warmest wishes.. ~Suze
Date: 4/19/2025 11:27:00 AM
If you can write something like this poem, you are truely beautiful. Kind wishes, Kai
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Susan Ashley
Date: 4/22/2025 10:08:00 AM
Dear Kai, I’m truly moved by your heartwarming comment. Thank you my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 4/17/2025 8:43:00 AM
Dear poet, dear friend, there's a lot to take in from your poem, a poem within a poem, within a poem artfully written by your playful heart of plucking strings to hear the sounds in your reclined state of calm and comfort surrounded by imagination and creativity...Frederic
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Date: 4/19/2025 8:26:00 AM
Frederic, dear friend, dear poet, indeed, there are many playful moments and contradictions in this poem. I had fun letting my imagination fly in this one. Thank you for sharing in the whimsical flight with me. Your wonderful thoughts are truly treasured. Warmest wishes my dear friend.. ~Susan
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