Cloud Seeding

For thirty years, I made clouds in the sky.
Between abstract ideals, youth’s naiveté
became its own demand to keep a lie.
Whichever weakness colored those clouds gray,
romantic levees were all washed away,
but no corrosive puddle could defame
the kiss of rainbows lightning each last day.
For every summer’s storm has left the same
eroded scars, a memory’s braille of her name.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 11/13/2024 2:04:00 PM
Wow, Rob, a shorter yet totally stunning write! The romantic barrier or safeguard levee , terrific comparison. I completely agree with you, last line was worth some thinking turmoil. ‘ braille’ memory! Awesome. Sad that our ideals have leaks!
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Date: 11/29/2018 6:09:00 PM
wow, so deep and poignant, Knowing about you, i think I understand this one better than i would have otherwise. Can't believe i never saw this yet. Gotta do a group email to my friends on the NEWS. can you guess what it is???
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Rob Carmack
Date: 11/30/2018 5:51:00 PM
Thanks Andrea and yes, I have a good idea concerning the news.
Date: 7/10/2018 1:44:00 PM
So very touching Rob :)
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Rob Carmack
Date: 8/31/2018 12:29:00 PM
TY Flo.
Date: 6/27/2018 7:47:00 PM
TY Viv, I worked on that last line for a while before it came to me.
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Date: 6/24/2018 12:06:00 AM
'eroded scars, a memory's braille of her name'. Great line, Rob, great write. Regards, Viv
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Date: 6/21/2018 10:02:00 AM
Nicely penned, Rob. Wonderful metaphor! Favorite line,"romantic levees were all washed away" Good luck! Should do very well:)
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Rob Carmack
Date: 6/21/2018 10:44:00 PM
TY Daniel.
Date: 6/21/2018 7:01:00 AM
Gorgeous piece Rob! A delight to read. Good luck in the contest :) xomo
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Rob Carmack
Date: 6/21/2018 10:43:00 PM
A thanks with a hug Maureen.
Date: 6/21/2018 6:14:00 AM
Rob.. Enjoyed reading your work this morning, a terrific write! I hope this poem will place high in the contest!
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Rob Carmack
Date: 6/21/2018 10:43:00 PM
TY Lyric, glad to see you are still around.
Date: 6/21/2018 5:15:00 AM
Now this is deep... each line reads pain, it seems like a personal poem.. Great entry for this contest.. Hope you are well..
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Rob Carmack
Date: 6/27/2018 10:39:00 PM
Tommy - and to the ones I didn't.
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Rob Carmack
Date: 6/21/2018 10:42:00 PM
It is a personal poem. A tribute to all the past romances. TY for reading and commenting. I am doing well and hope you are the same.
Date: 6/21/2018 12:44:00 AM
This entry is simply spectacular Rob! It just kept getting better and better! I am impressed and I hope Dale will be too! : )
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Rob Carmack
Date: 6/21/2018 10:40:00 PM
TY very much Connie.
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