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* This is my first Monorhyme, and it seems a rather challenging form ... but fun! *


                         Not soon enough, will winter go away

                    Taking with it all that white and gray

               Waiting for the sun to thus betray

          Remains that frozen vestiges array

     Warming temps arising day-to-day

Winter's final gasps thus making way

     For such a bright and colorful display

          Exploding in an emerald green ballet

               A Cardinal in his crimson red beret

                    Sings the morn his romance resume'

                         A little "peeper", each dusk's protege

                              And groggy  hibernators join the fray

                                   Dancing 'cross a lawn of grass parquet

                              The squirrels making mischief, so risque'

                         Thus  worthy of a  brooding Hemingway

                    All these things to chase the cold dismay

               Of a long  and somber  winter's disarray

          And  if allowed  an old  and trite  cliche'

     I wish we had the power to make it stay

Then every day could be ... a springtide day.




~ Honorable Mention ~  in the "Spring Fling Zing Thing King (or Queen)" Poetry Contest, Michael Vacek, Sponsor.

~ 3rd Place ~  in the "Late March 2018 Standard Any Form" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Sponsor.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 6/25/2018 8:45:00 PM
Back to congratulate you again! An awesome poem.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 7/3/2018 6:44:00 AM
Thank you so much, Susan - blessings! :-) <3
Date: 6/24/2018 6:07:00 PM
Congratulations on your very well deserved win, Greg !!! Hugs Eve ~`*
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/25/2018 11:17:00 AM
Very kind of you, Eve, thank you so much, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 6/24/2018 3:10:00 PM
Beautiful, Greg. It's been so long, that I don't even recall what I entered anyway!! but congrats to you for making the winners' list.Well deserved!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/25/2018 11:17:00 AM
Thank you very much, Andrea - yeah, this was a surprise, time-wise! :-) <3
Date: 6/24/2018 2:04:00 PM
I agree with you that monorhymes are a challenging form especially if you write a long one like this beauty. Congratulations Gregory. : )
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/25/2018 11:16:00 AM
That's very sweet of you, Connie - thank you so much! :-) <3
Date: 6/24/2018 11:21:00 AM
Back with congrats! xomo <3
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/25/2018 11:16:00 AM
Thank you, Dear Mo! :-) <3
Date: 4/6/2018 5:24:00 PM
Normally with mono rhymes after twelve rhymes it usually sounds forced, this is so original and fresh sounding, your vocabulary and talent shine brightly in this write!!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/24/2018 6:12:00 AM
Thank you so much, John, that means a great deal to me ... I worked very hard to make it so, and not let the rhyme itself pull it down, but flow and be a fresh and bright story as well. Thank you for noticing, my friend! :-)
Date: 4/3/2018 11:13:00 PM
Back with congrats, Gregory.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 4/4/2018 7:29:00 PM
Thank you, Line!
Date: 4/2/2018 4:30:00 PM
Such a great monorhyme! I enjoyed reading this one aloud.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 4/4/2018 7:28:00 PM
That's so kind of you, Carole - this is my first attempt at the form, so I greatly appreciate it! Blessings, friend! :-) <3
Date: 3/31/2018 9:30:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Words escape me. Well written, great rhythm. Well thought out. A joy to read.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 3/31/2018 10:55:00 PM
Thank you so much, Susan, I'm pleased you enjoyed it! Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 3/31/2018 5:22:00 PM
This is just awesome Greg! I can't believe it is your first monorhyme it is penned so brilliantly. I am sure it will fly to the top of the list!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 3/31/2018 10:55:00 PM
Many kind thank you's, Connie - I'm glad you enjoyed it, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 3/31/2018 5:15:00 PM
Wow, awesome creative rhymes, Gregory. And a great picture.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 3/31/2018 10:56:00 PM
Thank you very much, Agnes - blessings! :-)
Date: 3/31/2018 11:22:00 AM
Exquisite monorhyme, Gregory. Rich imagery and quality lines. Awesome and your form is lovely too.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 3/31/2018 10:57:00 PM
That's very kind of you, Line - thank you so much, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 3/30/2018 8:23:00 AM
An awesome uplifting spring fling zing entry for the contest; Good luck in it Gregory!~Che :)
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 3/31/2018 6:24:00 AM
Very kind of you, Cheryl - thank you so much, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 3/29/2018 3:52:00 PM
Excellent and delightful, my friend! A new look with zigzag... love how you wrote this one!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 3/30/2018 3:45:00 AM
Shape poetry is not my strong point, Kim, but I'm trying a bit more ... I know there are software tools, but I like doing almost everything the old-fashioned "manual" way. Blessings and many thanks, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 3/29/2018 11:38:00 AM
Fantastic monorhyme Greg! I found eight lines daunting :) good luck in the contest! xomo <3
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 3/30/2018 3:42:00 AM
Very kind of you, Mo - I may add a couple more - it seems a bit disjointed. Glad you enjoyed it, friend! :-) <3
Date: 3/29/2018 9:54:00 AM
Very well written. I love it! Good luck in the contest. It looks like a winner :)
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 3/30/2018 3:41:00 AM
That's very kind of you, Heidi - thanks so much, my friend! :-) <3