Clock Ticks

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clock ticks
                                       moment fleeting
                                  gossamer calm twilight 
                                 glistening vermilion aura
                    Sun leaving, painting sky with crimson hue
                              past poignant, divine, eternal 
                               breathtaking present thrills
                                         limitless charm
                                            clock ticks


                  
                                        February 8, 2022
                      "Give Me A Rictameter" Poetry Contest
                                       Sponsor: M.L.Kiser
              Syllables (2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2) checked by HMS.com

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Meghan Hutchings

Date: 2/17/2022 11:44:00 AM

Congratulations! I love all the beauty you fit into one fleeting moment! I could visualize it so well because of your excellent word choice. Wonderful job! God bless and much love...Meghan

JCB Brul

Date: 2/10/2022 6:41:00 AM

Splendid piece. I am new to this form and it seems hard due to word limits but you did it well dear Mala. Best wishes in the contest and onto my FAVES.

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 2/10/2022 7:01:00 AM

Thanks, JCB. This form is new to me too! It's wonderful to learn new forms.

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 2/9/2022 8:22:00 PM

Very picturesque, love the vivid colors here like vermillion and crimson, the limitless sky is so inspiring! Best wishes for the contest~

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 2/10/2022 7:03:00 AM

Thank you. I love using colour-words, Michelle - objects sound vibrant!