Climax

That was his last dime
Spinning his favorite song
I have seen him before
A couple of times
Long enough to say so slong

What is my fear
That I study in him
How a man can fall off 
Not fall ...
The bandwagon picking up
Direlicts

We ought to pay more attention
To the prevention of things like this
That make the evening news
Man's tears have never saved 
Anything ... quite a bad sign then
They should not make guns
So prevalent.

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Skat A

January 4, 2016 at 9:45 PM

well said... awesome write... SKAT

Anna-Marie Docherty

June 1, 2009 at 12:33 AM

An interesting title, but so apt too. Things have come far enough, it's time to get help out there and prevent these happeniings...You write this so effectively I hope if falls on eyes that can make a difference in a world...Well done Ruben, Anna-Marie.

Syed Amaan Ahmad

May 29, 2009 at 1:07 PM

Touching...beautifully created!

Cesar Cantu

May 29, 2009 at 12:49 PM

Sad indeed, I could actually imagine your eyes staring at a dead scene, an empty house that seems so small right now; thanks for the experience, yeah!!!=)

Des Juan Richardson

May 28, 2009 at 12:23 PM

Excellent write or shall I say "Right"! I have lost friends and casual neighborhood folk to gun violence. Senseless! Crossfire took my childhood best friend last summer. Wow! Powerful! ~Des Juan

Sajdah Al-Riyami

May 27, 2009 at 8:21 AM

Brilliant Man!Yew capture It So Perfectly

Colin Mitchell Williams

May 27, 2009 at 7:02 AM

Perhaps one day L'nass they will stop producing toy guns and toy weapons... perhaps they will realize how the real thing can be seen merely as a toy..... excellent stuff !

Kristin Reynolds

May 21, 2009 at 3:28 AM

that is the fear; one man's loss is our own. God bless you, Kristin

Brandy Megens

May 20, 2009 at 3:14 PM

such a sad reality my friend nice write

Keith Bickerstaffe

May 14, 2009 at 7:01 AM

I'm afraid your title steered me in a completely diferent direction... but I should know you by now! An excellent piece, strongly worded, with fine imagery and content. BRAVO my friend!! Best wishes, Keith

Charmaine Chircop

May 13, 2009 at 11:53 PM

this is so true,a ver sad reality leading us to shed more tears my friend---charma

Charlene Bird

May 13, 2009 at 8:53 PM

An interesting and insightful piece with so much truth in these well written lines.

Anthony Nutter

May 13, 2009 at 3:19 AM

Great write an insight. Well done

John Rhinem

May 12, 2009 at 7:32 PM

This is a very interesting write my dear friend!!!?:):)~"Hello Talented & Priceless L'nass!!!":):)~I hope that life is truly going beautifully for "You & Your Blessed Loved Ones Dear Brother!!!":):)~And I agree with "Your" entire last stanza, completely!!!~ am a bit pressed for time right now; but "You" have been upon my mind quite a bit....But i believe that "God" would wish it this way, or it would not be!!!?~I shall come to visit "You" tomorrow~To be blessed by "Your Words!!!"~"Love2UAll"~By

Nadia Shahwan

May 12, 2009 at 3:50 PM

Beautiful poem.

James Peranteau

May 12, 2009 at 2:44 PM

L'nass,..some how I feel something tragic happened here,...If so I pray for your comforting nights! Your friend poetically,..james

May 12, 2009 at 1:35 PM

Timely message in this poem shared in a thought provoking way. Such a sad reality for far too many. Thank you for your kind words on my poem. Keep on writing. Karen