Climax

That was his last dime Spinning his favorite song I have seen him before A couple of times Long enough to say so slong What is my fear That I study in him How a man can fall off Not fall ... The bandwagon picking up Direlicts We ought to pay more attention To the prevention of things like this That make the evening news Man's tears have never saved Anything ... quite a bad sign then They should not make guns So prevalent.

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Skat A

Date: 1/4/2016 9:45:00 PM

well said... awesome write... SKAT

Anna-Marie Docherty

Date: 6/1/2009 12:33:00 AM

An interesting title, but so apt too. Things have come far enough, it's time to get help out there and prevent these happeniings...You write this so effectively I hope if falls on eyes that can make a difference in a world...Well done Ruben, Anna-Marie.

Syed Amaan Ahmad

Date: 5/29/2009 1:07:00 PM

Touching...beautifully created!

Cesar Cantu

Date: 5/29/2009 12:49:00 PM

Sad indeed, I could actually imagine your eyes staring at a dead scene, an empty house that seems so small right now; thanks for the experience, yeah!!!=)

Des Juan Richardson

Date: 5/28/2009 12:23:00 PM

Excellent write or shall I say "Right"! I have lost friends and casual neighborhood folk to gun violence. Senseless! Crossfire took my childhood best friend last summer. Wow! Powerful! ~Des Juan

Sajdah Al-Riyami

Date: 5/27/2009 8:21:00 AM

Brilliant Man!Yew capture It So Perfectly

Colin Mitchell Williams

Date: 5/27/2009 7:02:00 AM

Perhaps one day L'nass they will stop producing toy guns and toy weapons... perhaps they will realize how the real thing can be seen merely as a toy..... excellent stuff !

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 5/21/2009 3:28:00 AM

that is the fear; one man's loss is our own. God bless you, Kristin

Brandy Megens

Date: 5/20/2009 3:14:00 PM

such a sad reality my friend nice write

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 5/14/2009 7:01:00 AM

I'm afraid your title steered me in a completely diferent direction... but I should know you by now! An excellent piece, strongly worded, with fine imagery and content. BRAVO my friend!! Best wishes, Keith

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 5/13/2009 11:53:00 PM

this is so true,a ver sad reality leading us to shed more tears my friend---charma

Charlene Bird

Date: 5/13/2009 8:53:00 PM

An interesting and insightful piece with so much truth in these well written lines.

Anthony Nutter

Date: 5/13/2009 3:19:00 AM

Great write an insight. Well done

John Rhinem

Date: 5/12/2009 7:32:00 PM

This is a very interesting write my dear friend!!!?:):)~"Hello Talented & Priceless L'nass!!!":):)~I hope that life is truly going beautifully for "You & Your Blessed Loved Ones Dear Brother!!!":):)~And I agree with "Your" entire last stanza, completely!!!~ am a bit pressed for time right now; but "You" have been upon my mind quite a bit....But i believe that "God" would wish it this way, or it would not be!!!?~I shall come to visit "You" tomorrow~To be blessed by "Your Words!!!"~"Love2UAll"~By

Nadia Shahwan

Date: 5/12/2009 3:50:00 PM

Beautiful poem.

James Peranteau

Date: 5/12/2009 2:44:00 PM

L'nass,..some how I feel something tragic happened here,...If so I pray for your comforting nights! Your friend poetically,..james

Date: 5/12/2009 1:35:00 PM

Timely message in this poem shared in a thought provoking way. Such a sad reality for far too many. Thank you for your kind words on my poem. Keep on writing. Karen

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/12/2009 1:18:00 PM

Oh this is a heart breaking poem that speaks of real life and lost people. Well done, L'nass. ~ Carrie

Trudy Diane Rider

Date: 5/12/2009 12:03:00 PM

Quite a sad sign of the times L'nass..well worded. You are truely gifted. ~Trudy~