Kim Rodrigues Poet Sapphic stanza

Clad in Winter

Whirling flakes of fantasy softly tango,
cheek to cheek, or modestly waltzing strangers.
Blizzard whiteout buffaloes moon and starlight,
   cloaking the lovers.

Frozen fountain, brazenly fetching, catching
coins of ice, those stupefied flattened pennies.
Queen of snow and fairies do bluster shavings.
   Breathless the statue.

Snowmen slurry tottering, wayward listing.
Melting, baring, chattering cherub crystals.
Water flowing merrily whistles sport at
   winter’s undressing.

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Reason A. Poteet December 9, 2024 at 8:33 AM Lovely, Kim with just the right touch of alliteration throughout. The last thought adds an element of humor which appeals to me. Well-done, congrats on a fine sapphic stanza and on your placement. Kim Rodrigues December 9, 2024 at 9:46 AM So glad you enjoyed the humor in the last stanza! Thank you, dear Reason!

thriveni c mysore December 8, 2024 at 8:01 PM Oh poet friend KR, Congratulations on your win. Poet CC's contest are like litmus tests, You shine here. Bask in the glory,lovely write. Cheers !!! Kim Rodrigues December 8, 2024 at 8:36 PM Thank you so much, Thriveni, for such a lovely comment! I enjoyed writing for this contest!

Richard D Seal October 18, 2024 at 4:23 AM Hi Kim, This is one the best poems on winter I can remember reading, 'coins of ice', the whole write is beautifully put together. Take care, Richard Kim Rodrigues October 18, 2024 at 9:51 AM I appreciate that so much, Richrd! Thank you!

Paige Hind October 17, 2024 at 1:54 PM For some reason, I returned to this one...you edited it, and it's soooo much better, Kim...wow, love your imagery and personification- "Queen of snow and fairies do bluster shavings. Breathless the statue." that is very, very deep

Unseeking Seeker October 16, 2024 at 7:26 PM A perfect illustration and how-to-do-it guide on writing in this difficult form. All the best for the contest, Kim. Kim Rodrigues October 17, 2024 at 4:52 AM Thank you, Unseeking.

Silent One October 16, 2024 at 10:19 AM I love how your poem skillfully contrasts the beauty of winter's stillness with the eventual melting and transformation of the snow. The frozen fountain, once regal and "brazenly fetching," eventually gives way to the "melting, baring, chattering cherub crystals," signaling the change from the frozen state to a thaw. Kim Rodrigues October 16, 2024 at 10:22 AM I so appreciate your critique! Thank you, Silent!

John Read October 16, 2024 at 9:05 AM Sadly we no longer seem to get snow in London now days, I used to love building snowmen back in the day, I blame global warming, enjoyed reading your poem Kim have a lovely evening. Xx Kim Rodrigues October 16, 2024 at 10:23 AM No snow in Minesota for Christmas and then went home and not one flake last year. We will see what happens this year. Thank you, John!

Joseph P. DiMino October 16, 2024 at 7:21 AM "Snowmen slurry tottering, wayward listing. Melting, baring, chattering cherub crystals. Water flowing merrily whistles sport at winter’s undressing." -- wonderful imagery! True dynamic poetry! Kim Rodrigues October 16, 2024 at 10:23 AM Thank you so much, Joe, and for letting me know what you liked!

Hilda Greenhough October 15, 2024 at 6:31 PM I can feel the cold beauty in your poem. I enjoy the personification of the snowman. Snow brings quiet to the earth. Kim Rodrigues October 15, 2024 at 7:18 PM Beauty and quiet except for the wind. Perhaps I will see some this year!

Jan Allison October 15, 2024 at 6:12 PM wow Kim, I dont have a clue about how to write the form but your poem is truly beautiful! hugs Jan xx Jan Allison October 16, 2024 at 1:49 AM I dont understand them at all lol - its al greek to me! hugs Jan xx Kim Rodrigues October 15, 2024 at 6:17 PM Thank you, Jan! I worked hard at it! I was thankful for this little book I have that helped to understand trochees and dactyls…phew!