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Clad in Winter

Whirling flakes of fantasy softly tango,
cheek to cheek, or modestly waltzing strangers.
Blizzard whiteout buffaloes moon and starlight,
   cloaking the lovers.

Frozen fountain, brazenly fetching, catching
coins of ice, those stupefied flattened pennies.
Queen of snow and fairies do bluster shavings.
   Breathless the statue.

Snowmen slurry tottering, wayward listing.
Melting, baring, chattering cherub crystals.
Water flowing merrily whistles sport at
   winter’s undressing.

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Reason A. Poteet

Date: 12/9/2024 8:33:00 AM

Lovely, Kim with just the right touch of alliteration throughout. The last thought adds an element of humor which appeals to me. Well-done, congrats on a fine sapphic stanza and on your placement.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/9/2024 9:46:00 AM

So glad you enjoyed the humor in the last stanza! Thank you, dear Reason!

thriveni c mysore

Date: 12/8/2024 8:01:00 PM

Oh poet friend KR, Congratulations on your win. Poet CC's contest are like litmus tests, You shine here. Bask in the glory,lovely write. Cheers !!!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/8/2024 8:36:00 PM

Thank you so much, Thriveni, for such a lovely comment! I enjoyed writing for this contest!

Richard D Seal

Date: 10/18/2024 4:23:00 AM

Hi Kim, This is one the best poems on winter I can remember reading, 'coins of ice', the whole write is beautifully put together. Take care, Richard

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/18/2024 9:51:00 AM

I appreciate that so much, Richrd! Thank you!

Paige Hind

Date: 10/17/2024 1:54:00 PM

For some reason, I returned to this one...you edited it, and it's soooo much better, Kim...wow, love your imagery and personification- "Queen of snow and fairies do bluster shavings. Breathless the statue." that is very, very deep

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 10/16/2024 7:26:00 PM

A perfect illustration and how-to-do-it guide on writing in this difficult form. All the best for the contest, Kim.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/17/2024 4:52:00 AM

Thank you, Unseeking.

Silent One

Date: 10/16/2024 10:19:00 AM

I love how your poem skillfully contrasts the beauty of winter's stillness with the eventual melting and transformation of the snow. The frozen fountain, once regal and "brazenly fetching," eventually gives way to the "melting, baring, chattering cherub crystals," signaling the change from the frozen state to a thaw.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/16/2024 10:22:00 AM

I so appreciate your critique! Thank you, Silent!

John Read

Date: 10/16/2024 9:05:00 AM

Sadly we no longer seem to get snow in London now days, I used to love building snowmen back in the day, I blame global warming, enjoyed reading your poem Kim have a lovely evening. Xx

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/16/2024 10:23:00 AM

No snow in Minesota for Christmas and then went home and not one flake last year. We will see what happens this year. Thank you, John!

Joe Dimino

Date: 10/16/2024 7:21:00 AM

"Snowmen slurry tottering, wayward listing. Melting, baring, chattering cherub crystals. Water flowing merrily whistles sport at winter’s undressing." -- wonderful imagery! True dynamic poetry!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/16/2024 10:23:00 AM

Thank you so much, Joe, and for letting me know what you liked!