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City Lights On Waking Up

I waken to a rush of sound and light. Somebody honks a horn as cars whiz past. My friend has driven us into the night and to a place where life is moving fast. I sit upright so I might take it in. The skyline is a smear of pulsing glow. Resplendent is this blur amidst the din of traffic. I see artwork of Van Gogh! A starry starry night could not compare To how this city looks when I’m half blind. But now I grab the glasses which I wear for my nearsightedness, which tricks my mind. The street lights - still so bright - are right and clear when blobs of luminescence disappear! The scrambled word is T A R N D A I Written 10/3/14 by Andrea Dietrich For the "Find the Puzzle" Poetry Contest of nette onclaud

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Date: 10/15/2014 8:35:00 AM
I don't much like cities, prefer to be out in the country with trees around but you made the city seem pretty and almost inviting.
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Date: 10/11/2014 2:15:00 PM
Congratulation on this marvelous sonnet, on your win. WOOHOO!!!!
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Date: 10/10/2014 10:34:00 PM
Very expressive title, congrats on the win, Andrea
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Date: 10/10/2014 8:01:00 PM
A well told story/sonnet !! We live in the country, without street lights, ....so it is very dark. When visiting someone, it is so bright...seems so funny and strange when you aren't used to it.....makes it hard for sleeping!!
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Date: 10/10/2014 6:27:00 PM
Stopping back with my congratulations on your win Andrea.
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Date: 10/10/2014 4:16:00 PM
dropping back with my congrats Andrea:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 10/10/2014 3:28:00 PM
Andrea, I love your sonnet. Your words truly made a verbal painting of the puzzle word, "Radiant." Congratulations on your win! Sandra
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Date: 10/6/2014 5:32:00 PM
Kind of a waking dream, eh? I get bleary eyed just reading this. Like it mucho though. Love, daver
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Date: 10/6/2014 3:47:00 PM
this is just beautiful, Andrea - a BIG winner here. Wouldn't even know that word (I'm impressed!!!)
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Date: 10/5/2014 10:43:00 PM
A wonderful entry for the contest Andrea. I couldn't think of a thing to write for this one. Yours is sure to do well!
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Date: 10/5/2014 5:34:00 PM
good evening Andrea, I really like what you did in this poem. You can picture your words so vividly. good luck in the contest with this gem my friend. look forward to chatting with you.
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Date: 10/5/2014 4:40:00 PM
You wrote a nice urban "slice of life" here. Good luck in the contest! I have posted another urban - themed poem today. In fact today I went on a walking tour of the Lower East Side today! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 10/5/2014 4:07:00 PM
Man made beauty surpassing sky's splendor because of the brilliance of your writing, dear Andrea! A stunning description! Good luck on the contest!
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Date: 10/5/2014 4:07:00 PM
This is brilliant brings us right into the modern era, then penetrates time, i see it as a time travel poem,,,mustlook at the contest,,,good luck..
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Date: 10/5/2014 1:30:00 PM
I love sonnets and this one sits so high up there my friend!! Rhyme is perfect , flow if awesome and message very clear. Rating a super, super 7 and enjoyed this fine read today..
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Date: 10/5/2014 9:31:00 AM
Very nicely penned Andrea....I am not sure I understand this contest....and scrambled words?...I will recheck to see if I can figure it out..
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Date: 10/5/2014 9:38:00 AM
Ok I checked it out and I get it now...
Date: 10/5/2014 7:29:00 AM
What an amazing read. A Pleasure to say the least. I really like the way your visuals dance before my eyes. Out of your vast library of fantastic sonnets I think this one should sit on the top shelf. I'm sure that the scrambled word makes it even more mind blowing.
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Date: 10/5/2014 7:05:00 AM
I like the way your mind works, this is a cool perspective.
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Date: 10/4/2014 11:47:00 PM
I like it a lot Andrea. I have written this challenge several times only to throw it out. I have not been able to find any inspiration to write a competitive poem. I have read some great poems for this competition though. This one is very creative and beautifully written.
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Date: 10/4/2014 8:37:00 PM
I finally figured out these puzzle poems...this one is great....the blur of traffic like Van Gogh...hugs Tim
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Date: 10/4/2014 8:26:00 PM
Beautiful poem with a very cute twist Andrea, I love it.
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Date: 10/4/2014 6:08:00 PM
Loved this poem!
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Date: 10/4/2014 5:35:00 PM
You painted a brilliant picture here - I adore 'starry starry night' have got it buzzing through my head now!, good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xxx
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