City During December


Gentle winds
  Gentle on the city 
    City near the sea 
      City lush and green 
        Green is beautiful
          Green is pleasant 
            Pleasant to the eyes 
              Pleasant to feel 
                Feel refreshed 
                  Feel the breeze 
Breeze blows faster 
  Breeze turns into cyclone 
    Cyclone 'Vardah'
      Cyclone is coming 
        Coming with fury
          Coming to make landfall 
            Landfall in late afternoon 
              Landfall brings rain 
                Rain reminds of flood
                  Rain is heavy 
Heavy is the damage 
  Heavy windstorm lashes 
    Lashes down electric posts 
      Lashes through the trees 
        Trees tumble down 
          Trees ripped off roots 
            Roots too weak to withstand 
              Roots can be seen 
                Seen above ground 
                  Seen and felt
Felt and smelt
  Felt in the air 
    Air smells strong 
      Air scented with leaves 
        Leaves that are crushed 
          Leaves on the road 
            Road is blocked 
              Road filled with branches 
                Branches all fallen 
                  Branches fresh and big 
Big vehicles pulverised 
  Big loss to the city 
    City without its green limbs 
      City experienced damage
        Damage of verdure 
          Damage in December 
            December double disasters unfurled 
              December remembered for devastation 
                 Devastation ...
                    Unfurled ...


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                               22.12.16
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Allison Avatar
December 30, 2016 at 9:13 PM
WOW Jo a fabulous blitz poem many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx
Nusker Avatar
December 29, 2016 at 11:07 PM
You are a master in blitz. Wonderful work. Congratulations!
Krampe Avatar
December 29, 2016 at 8:09 PM
Thanks for this intriguing example of a blitz, I'd never seen one before. Congrats on your placement, Jo.
Roper Avatar
December 29, 2016 at 8:03 PM
Love the form, Jo, congratulations on your win. Have a Happy New Year’s and all your wishes come true… and don’t forget to eat those Black-eyed peas :) Hugs Eve
Andresen Avatar
December 28, 2016 at 7:38 AM
- A really great poem, Jo - The shape is beautiful :) - Happy New Year :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Ogundare Avatar
December 28, 2016 at 4:01 AM
I love your choice of words with this deep poem Jo...
Marcum Wong Avatar
December 24, 2016 at 12:12 AM
Wow Jo, how impressive this poem is! It should be used as an example of how to write this form. Brilliant my friend! The way you have designed your lines is truly creative and spectacular! 7 Have a happy holiday! : )
Trifiatis Avatar
December 22, 2016 at 11:46 AM
Captivating true writing dear, Jo! A seven!
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