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City Blues

CITY BLUES (triple Etheree) Hey! Ol’ man Weavin’ roun’ Haid be foggy An close ta tha groun’ (six-feet undah that is) Hey! man yo chin be runnin’ An I aint jus be a funnin’ Aint got no neck jisa ol’ washboard Get outa heah! Make yo peace wid da Lawd Hey! Ol’ man Watcha yo smile! Seen you lookin’ Dreamin’ once in a while Lookin’ at dem young chics Hey man you caint get nowheah You stop ‘n stare jis fohget it! Yo brain all ‘ROOOGA’ model T Ford Git outa heah! Make yo peace wid da Lawd Hey! Ol’ man Don’ you go Givin’ me looks Like iz a rap-crow I got nowheah ta go You think how you got some pain? I beat yo haid wid yo own cane! Take yo choice da rivah o’ da morgue Heah I come! Make yo peace wid da Lawd

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Joe Maverick

Date: 2/25/2015 4:41:00 PM

I reckon this is groovy, L O L))) I suppose that comment 'is old hat' well that's that..' good to check this out Daver..'

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 5/11/2010 6:51:00 PM

five stars and thumbs up all three of the Etheree! love em big time Daver! Robert

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/2/2010 8:39:00 PM

already read, i am just reading and enjoying again, besides I will be writting one for our friend Andrea, just doing my homework. hope you do not mind me studing the form. so if you see me on your ETHEREE poems. i am studing, cheers,..p..d

Faleshia Murphy

Date: 4/26/2010 11:38:00 AM

very nice write very funny thanks for your kind comments have a great day faleshia

Skat A

Date: 4/25/2010 7:21:00 PM

Funny, enjoyed I can actually pronounce all da words aint tha something,,always a pleasant read,,Irma

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/24/2010 6:45:00 PM

This is one is so unusual, Daver, and I like how you played with language in it! I need to get busy on posting my double etheree. I just have too many posts all at once here becuase of the haiku contests. haha. LUv, andrea

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/24/2010 3:04:00 PM

Interesting street language that you have used in this one...Keep the creative pen flowing ...Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my write "Vanilla Slime" ...The song is "Writing Me Softly With His Rhyme" sorry left out one word..Type in at the top of page and it should take you there...Sara

James Marshall Goff

Date: 4/24/2010 1:13:00 PM

Greetings! Daver! YES! such pure delight read aloud! I just finished viewing "best of antiques roadshow Great Britain" then came here before my walk in the park, and was immensely delighted to find this "grain o' gold" bouncing off your nice comments to me!!! I had been writing a bit loothesome lately, and needed sumthin' uptempo! jimbo

James Peranteau

Date: 4/24/2010 11:21:00 AM

Awesome write Sir, I was laughing at dis one dude cause I know some souls who beez talkin like dat ! Great write...filed with character ! goes to dah favz ! james

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/24/2010 10:34:00 AM

Daver, the "battle scars" were the blemishes on the leaf in the photo of a falling leaf that was posted for Raul's contest. Nothing spooky -- just a view of the photo.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/24/2010 10:11:00 AM

Hey, ol' man, if'n you be starin' at dem youngins, you got some splaining ta do ta yer wife! She might jest beat ya "wid yo own cane." Love the dialect employed here, Daver. Fun poem to read aloud! Love, Carolyn

Tim Ryerson

Date: 4/24/2010 7:47:00 AM

This is a side-achin' beauty, Daver! Perfectly constructed and I LOVE the dialect too! - Tim

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/22/2010 9:17:00 AM

Quite humourous etheree. I enjoyed it

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/22/2010 9:01:00 AM

Good one I like the fun in the read ""Make yo peace wid da Lawd"" I do not think one has to be old to make peace with God. This is good and funny..p.d.