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Christmas Magic

Braised by the sparkle of snow on the ground. Drawn by a tapered moon. Chilled by the air you rise to hound then startled by the crumpled tune. Mist floating heavy with sweat on the banks. Damp to the open mouth. Ice crusting over to give it's thanks with winds giving way to the south. Black oily skies in overcast clouds dampening the moonlight to dim. Crescendos of light forming covenant shrouds with joy giving way to a hymn. White crested branches of snow covered trees. Praying for flakes that still fall. Hoping there's still, some in the breeze who'll make it to ground in a squall. Spells in the wind are telling their stories. Hoping you'll feel Christmas Magic. For those who will listen to all their glories, or wouldn't; would that be tragic!

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Date: 12/9/2013 11:52:00 PM
wow, some great images and excellent meter here. It's nice to see someone new. I don't believe i read your stuff before. Thanks for your comment on It Matters Not. I wrote it a long time ago and reworked it for the contest. It was example of a swap quatrain. A really cool poetry form. I hope to hear from you again and then see more of your poetry.
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Trevor Mcleod
Date: 12/10/2013 9:03:00 PM
This Swap Quatrain does a good job of creating a nice flow and it helps with metering. It's the best example I think I've seen of a flow formula. I've been thinking that one day I would like to balance the syllables with hard and soft consonants. I think a chart of the consonants could help separate them into categories of strength and weakness. That will be a project for me some day. In the meantime; when I see a poem like the Swap Quatrain you posted, it makes me look forward to new and evolved poetry. The future looks brighter!
Date: 12/6/2013 6:01:00 PM
A nice and flowing, pleasant read that carried me along through its beautiful imagery and message.
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Date: 12/6/2013 4:56:00 PM
I enjoyed Christmas Magic! Good work Trevor!
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