Choreography By the Unconscious

Series of daydreams blind me,
reality seems dull and bland.
When awake I'm still fatigued, 
It's time to take a stand.

Reality is all work,
striving to provide.
Elaborate dreams of success,
projecting deep inside your mind.

In your dreams you can be successful,
doing what you do everyday.
You can make an infinite income,
and have everything your way.

The average human being in reality,
makes a decent wage.
Still, most struggle to survive,
trapped in life's invisible cage.

No limitations in the fantasy realm,
your mind sets the stage.
Choreography by the unconscious,
horizons spread a distant gauge:

***I own a little cottage on fifty acres of land. 
Fields of vegetation and a lake made by man.

***A beautiful model bride to exemplify true love. 
Another on the side I just picked her up last month.

***A private corporate jet with my own attending crew.
To do with at my discretion, "Sir, what can I get you"

***An over-sized garage with every car my brain produces.
This is definitely a mirage, oh how my brain seduces..


Jared Pickett
12/21/05
Asavvy1
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Brown Avatar
January 22, 2010 at 5:05 AM
The tirle pulled me in and the verse kept me in captivity! Awesome write! You have huge dreams , they will come true!
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December 6, 2009 at 1:11 PM
Wow! I think this is your best ever, Jared, and that's saying a lot! The dreamscape chorography set by the mind's stage is a brilliant concept to express the freedom we feel in dreams. Some people have lucid dreams in which they know they are dreaming. A counselor once asked what I do when having a lucid dream and I did not hesitate to answer, "Fly." It's the same type of freedom you describe in this brilliant poem! Love, Carolyn
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December 3, 2009 at 11:11 AM
Fabulous imagery conveyed here with a smooth rhythm and flow! Great job! Thanks so much for sharing~Mary
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November 28, 2009 at 12:08 PM
funny, keep dreaming!
Goff Avatar
November 28, 2009 at 6:53 AM
much fun! Jared! great imagination! Jimbo
Austin Avatar
November 27, 2009 at 7:32 AM
Yes! How wonderful the fantasy realm. I use it constantly. All the things I aint I turn into marvel. Love, daver
P Avatar
November 27, 2009 at 2:23 AM
Well Written by inspiratio'
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November 26, 2009 at 5:51 PM
Oh ... This Is Definitely Going Into My Fav's ... Mr. Pickett ... This Thought of Yours Is A Great Focal-Point In All Humans ... 'cause who doesn't dream - (if they don't, boy, they don't know what they're missing! - smile) ... Chat You later my friend ... MoonBee
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November 26, 2009 at 3:44 PM
Kool poem Jared, i would love to see in your mind, you write some splendid pieces >> James
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November 26, 2009 at 2:09 PM
This one is wonderful, Jared. Imagination leads to reality... eventually. (maybe) It is good to imagine and to live with mental enjoyment. Wise words are in this poem. Nice write. Dane Ann
Kelly Avatar
November 26, 2009 at 7:34 AM
Cleverly named and presented , Jared ....
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November 26, 2009 at 5:35 AM
OK so I made it to Pittsburgh in one piece but u must check your Soup Mail in a few .. now my brother was wonderful enough to let me use his fired up computer to stay in touch with my Soup Family during this holiday weekend.. now thats "brotherly love"... u know Philly... liberty bell... city of brotherly love... got me, right? check Soup Mail in a few minutes.. blessings .. luv.. "Sweetie"
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November 25, 2009 at 11:53 PM
Very imaginative writing Jared.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments & kind words today.
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November 25, 2009 at 10:51 PM
i love the little cottage on fifty acres of land and the lake made by man's hands ,Jared!yet you seem to want much more than that, a bride and another on the side,harem:)..you made me laugh,im enjoying this write..a private jet,i would love that to go around the world;)..regarding the cars..i can see them there,the collection..lovely dream indeed,yet lets tnk God we afford to dream..sweet write Jared,one of my fav poets indeed--Charma
Kendrick Avatar
November 25, 2009 at 1:59 PM
And so it can do that. The frustrations in life arrive when we want and day dream and never achieve any of the day dreams. Love the humor here. Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara
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November 25, 2009 at 1:57 PM
So much truth in your words. A touch of humor for a lighthearted approach. Still much for the reader to ponder about. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us and for dropping by to comment on my poem. Happy Thanksgiving! Karen
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November 25, 2009 at 12:29 PM
Hi Jared, thanks for your comment on my Haiku, I struggle with these. This poem of yours is awesome, I am a dreamer, so I can really relate to your tale. Good writing. I have a new contest started called, Anything Goes, should be fun to see what kinds of poetry I receive.
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November 25, 2009 at 5:42 AM
Wow ... tapped into another realm with this one, Asavvy 1, and I so enjoyed.. off to my errands today... \ Soup Mail 4 U ... "Sweetie"
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November 24, 2009 at 10:29 PM
This is a great funny poem...enjoyed reading...Marty
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November 24, 2009 at 8:49 PM
Your brains has some great seductions, nice work as always and yes, I have seen Funny Farm, you cracked me up...Raul
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