Choking On Jealousy

Face to face , eye to green eye , introduction to an unknown I pray this concept, unjustified : never to be cloned A seed planted, nurtured : is now fully grown An aroma filling my Heart with doubt, I feel so empty : alone I ask : does my Heart speak lies to YOU ; my most BELOVED Is my Heart twisted around the evil envy of Jealousy? How can I say with all my Heart : I LOVE YOU Without a green eyed monster raising its ugly hackles inside YOU Will Michael Jordan’s contest : “Twisted” untwist YOUR Heart Untwist my Heart ; so it can say “ I LOVE YOU Barbara Jean “ With no Jealous repercussions Dedicated to Barbara Jean Gorelick Inspired by Barbara and Michael Jordan's Contest " Let's get Untwisted "

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Laura Breidenthal

Date: 2/25/2012 9:13:00 PM

Excellent one. I enjoyed the concept of envy being a green eyed monster. Really painted quite a picture for me in my mind.Much enjoyed once again! Always, Laura

Lynette Chachere

Date: 2/19/2010 12:10:00 AM

I enjoy the "untwist" and i almost forgot. if you have tried typing in the maximum# of words you're allowed to have, and post it, then go back and type the rest, but slowly.meaning that you can put in a couple of words at a time, then repeat the process. whenever you write a long poem. i hope this helps you, Harry. Goodnight(: much love to you. -Always&Forever Lynn

Yoni Dvorkis

Date: 5/23/2009 6:58:00 AM

What would you have to be jealous of? Is there some kind of poets love triangle I don't know about:)? -Yoni

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 5/13/2009 7:35:00 PM

See your mail. BG

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/13/2009 2:28:00 PM

Jealousy can certainly leave us twisted up inside, HG. This is a good entry for Michael's contest! It's also a great dedication to one of the Soup Family's sweetest members. Very nice! Love, Carolyn

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 5/13/2009 1:11:00 PM

HG, This poem is a nice solution to the twisted untwisted poetry contest assignment. I think it's a sweet love poem with a little jealousy thrown in. Hmmm... That green eyed monster can really do havoc on a relationship-trust! I wrote a non-haiku variation of the "verticle end words" poetry. It was the end words that I liked. Mine can only be read from top to bottom. Elephant Dandruff" is a playful poetry exercise about a long lost friend. I'd be delighted to hear your reaction. Love Dane

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 5/13/2009 10:34:00 AM

I think this will go great in Micheal's contest. God Bless Phyl

Sharon Winter

Date: 5/13/2009 10:34:00 AM

I thought I saw your name here posting! Well, not sure what is going on but I just hope everything gets 'untwisted'. I certainly do not like reading that you feel empty and alone. It hurts my heart. Hope it is just for the poem. Certainly an excellent entry for Michael's contest! Good luck! Love & hugs, Shar xoxo

Izzy Gumbo

Date: 5/13/2009 7:28:00 AM

Wonderful! I love how your words flow in this one and it's perfect for that contest! Good luck my friend! :) Keep writing!

Edward Orozco

Date: 5/13/2009 6:55:00 AM

This is awesome. I really enjoyed reading it! You ate very talented. - jeremiah