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Chocolates

Chocolates at Christmas,
carefully I choose a
caramel coated in
calorific candy.
Could I eat another …
choice of coconut or 
creamy coffee truffle.

Pleiades C Poetry Contest
Sponsored by Kim Merryman

Checked with how many syllables

08~23~16

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2016

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October 26, 2016 at 10:57 AM

Beautiful poem about chocolate. Your poem opened a golden gate... It was in Egypt. Imagine it: I saw two chocolate girls in a swimming pool. They were happy children from a summer school. In a poor Egypt. I try to describe it: At short distance, a bomb blew up. Then, I think suddenly all we grew up... They were playing with a ball and laughed a lot. It was a digit ball on a tablet, but I forgot: If before or after Revolution, Still from a state of confusion.

August 26, 2016 at 1:01 PM

Back with chocolate coated congratulations, Jan. Very much deserved. Hugs // paul

August 26, 2016 at 5:08 AM

Congratulations on your fine win, Jan.

Anne-Lise Andresen

August 26, 2016 at 4:15 AM

- Congratulations on your winning poems, Jan :) - hugs and :)

August 26, 2016 at 5:02 AM

Many thanks Anne-Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

August 26, 2016 at 12:13 AM

...how sweet the taste of victory, Jan. Congrats! Viv x

Connie Marcum Wong

August 25, 2016 at 9:45 PM

Jan, I'm back to congratulate you on this piece you know I loved! 7 ; )

August 26, 2016 at 5:01 AM

I loved your poem too Connie :-) hugs Jan xx

August 25, 2016 at 8:32 PM

I'll take the coconut! I am a chocolate fanatic and your poem made me want some. A delicious write, Jan! Congrats on your 3rd place win! Blessings!

August 26, 2016 at 5:01 AM

Thanks Kim I'm delighted to place so well many thanks Jan xx

August 25, 2016 at 7:21 PM

Yum! Jan, congratulations on your 2nd Place win in the 'Pleiades C' contest! Hugs, Sandra

August 25, 2016 at 7:22 PM

Thanks so much Sandra I really enjoy this form:-) hugs Jan xx

August 25, 2016 at 5:19 PM

Congrats on your win Jan...Your comment on (clocks) made me smile...Hugs...

August 25, 2016 at 6:34 PM

Thought you would appreciate my wit Joseph lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars

August 25, 2016 at 5:16 PM

Jan, yummmmy! congrats on your placement :)-luloo

August 25, 2016 at 6:34 PM

Thanks LuLoo:-) hugs Jan xx

Janis Medders Tobechi

August 25, 2016 at 4:50 PM

This is a delicious poem. You can almost taste it. Congratulations.

August 25, 2016 at 4:55 PM

Thanks Janis:-) hugs Jan xx

August 25, 2016 at 4:49 PM

I think you may have got Kim delirious with this one, thought it would place higher but it was definitely a tough one to judge.Congrats on a fine placement!

August 25, 2016 at 4:55 PM

Thanks for the lovely comment John - I'm just grateful to place and for the poem to get more widely read:-) hugs Jan xx

Mark Paul Van Der Merwe

August 25, 2016 at 12:21 AM

MMMMM - I'm going to have chocolate tonight. Very tasty poetry, LOL Mark

August 25, 2016 at 1:38 AM

I'll be right over Mark lol:-) hugs Jan xx

August 24, 2016 at 5:41 PM

mmmmmm is my only reacton!!!

August 24, 2016 at 5:43 PM

LOL and a little more lighthearted than my latest offering lol:-) hugs Jan xx

August 24, 2016 at 5:01 PM

Deliciously lovely, Jan! Are you sure they're not a present from an evil admirer? Like the butcher he might take pleasure in inserting a fatal something in them! Hugs // paul

August 24, 2016 at 5:03 PM

ha ha ha now your mind is working overtime - wish I had an admirer who would buy me a box of chocs for £85 because that's the cost of the ones in the pic!:-) hugs Jan xx

August 24, 2016 at 2:16 PM

A 7 for this delicious pleiades, Jan! Janice

August 24, 2016 at 3:41 PM

Thanks Janice:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

August 24, 2016 at 2:03 PM

Yummmmm, I do indulge and have chocolates at Christmas, Belgian chocolates! Loved your mouth watering poem Jan. 7 ; )

August 24, 2016 at 2:13 PM

I love chocolate at any time of the year Connie!:-) hugs Jan xx

August 24, 2016 at 9:00 AM

Supercalorific poem Jan.

August 24, 2016 at 11:32 AM

lol Jean:-) hugs Jan xx

Sara Chansarkar

August 24, 2016 at 8:44 AM

I was about to do Chocolate Jan,but decided to do Coupons instead.Yours makes me hungry:)

August 24, 2016 at 11:31 AM

Its hard to think of a theme that other people won't write about thats why I enjoyed your poem and theme Sara:-) hugs jan xx

Scott Thirtyseven

August 24, 2016 at 7:56 AM

Tasty. One thing I realised earlier tonight, is that I have no chocolate to hand, and the shop's closed :(

August 24, 2016 at 8:06 AM

I always have a supply in Scott in fact I still have a tub of chocolates from Christmas - but once they are opened the temptation is too much and they vanish so quickly!:-) hugs Jan xx

August 24, 2016 at 1:39 AM

this one is good and tasty a winner already :)

August 24, 2016 at 7:52 AM

Thanks Eve:-) Hugs Jan xx

August 23, 2016 at 10:36 PM

I can only assume that you're late commenting on replies because you've got your hands and mouth full, Jan . Great verse. Yum x

August 24, 2016 at 7:52 AM

LOL Mr Viv:-) hugs Jan xx

August 23, 2016 at 9:26 PM

I have to confess, I stared at that photo for about an hour with my mouth watering, before I even got to the poem! If Nicola is Homer, then I am Marge, now pass the chocolates as I enjoy the lovely poem that came with them!!!! Hugs

August 24, 2016 at 7:53 AM

I could stare at the box Arthur - no way would I pay £85 for them though! hugs Jan xx

August 23, 2016 at 5:54 PM

Delicious! mmmmm chocolate... mmm

August 23, 2016 at 5:58 PM

mmmmm I agree they look yummy:-) Thanks for dropping by Cas:-) hugs Jan xx

August 23, 2016 at 4:18 PM

how you tempt with this delicious fare, jan...lovely!.. wait no longer for christmas!.huggs

August 23, 2016 at 4:22 PM

Hubby is now diabetic and I try not to put too much temptation in his way Nette - maybe I'll just let him drool over my poem:-) hugs Jan xx

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