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Chimney Swift

Chimney Swift

My precious chimney swift
Envy alone
Has named you so mundane
Tethered to the slightest pause
Amid your life upon the wing
Describing you as drab
Cigar shaped
And flying like a bat
While within me 
Your beauty burns
And I thank you so for that
For from my human complications
The conditions of my sin
You do so delightfully
Delightfully distract.




Circa 2005

This is my first poem posted to Poetry Soup. It remains one of my favourite own works. It is a love poem, with my whole soul within.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 2/1/2020 11:09:00 PM
Loving one's soul within is crucial, for that is what you are. Excellent write dear poet. What drew me to your poem were the words: Chimney Swift. The name of my residence for the last few months is: Chimney House, near a chimney tower, a historical place of the British era.
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 2/4/2020 7:25:00 AM
Then doubtless you have swifts! Thank you Aniruddha, poetry hugs, xomo!
Date: 10/7/2019 5:43:00 PM
Maureen I know where you're at on this poem. Swift's have always been my favorite bird. They come out at dusk eating all the insects. One moment of memory sticks in my mind heavily, was when I was in Hania, Greece on Crete. I had just parted with a friend who was going back to Germany. I stayed in Hania for several days. Had a room overlooking the port, and with my food from the local market and wine, I would sit out as the sunset and watch the swifts and swallows. Ah what memories.
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Jeff Connelly
Date: 10/8/2019 9:39:00 AM
I know how you love birds. I too have a great love, but I found that my spirit animal is any kind of deer (elk; moose eh, antelope, and such.
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 10/8/2019 7:04:00 AM
The aeronautic masters have me spellbound. I wrote The Swallows about being in the midst of a feeding mixed flock, tree, cliff and barn swallows and chimney swifts, passing within inches. And then there's falcons... be still my beating heart.
Date: 10/1/2019 4:47:00 PM
So wonderful to see a trophy awarded to you mo, many congratulations on your win :-) hugs Jan xx
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 10/2/2019 8:05:00 AM
Thank you Jan! Hugs <3 xomo!
Date: 10/1/2019 2:41:00 PM
Big congrats on your trophy win. I see the formula was heart-felt! It's great that you put so much love into this first post of yours at soup.
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 10/2/2019 7:27:00 AM
Thank you Andrea! This piece is so close to my heart... and feeling it was my very best, it was the one I felt best suited my debut here; the most me. ;), To receive this honour is um indescribable, it's visceral. Hugs! xomo
Date: 10/1/2019 1:23:00 PM
How wonderful this poem is Mo! It is very deserving of the Trophy! Congratulations! xxoo
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 10/2/2019 7:20:00 AM
Thank you Connie! :))) xomo!
Date: 10/1/2019 1:56:00 AM
Congrats Mo!;)
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 10/1/2019 8:36:00 AM
Thank you Brenda! <3 xomo!
Date: 10/1/2019 12:53:00 AM
Trophy worthy for sure Maureen. Congratulations. Tom
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 10/1/2019 8:34:00 AM
Thank you Tom, Hugs! xomo
Date: 10/1/2019 12:15:00 AM
Wow! Congrats. Thanks for sharing your talent. God bless you.
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 10/1/2019 8:34:00 AM
Thank you Beata! Bless you :) xomo
Date: 9/30/2019 8:48:00 PM
Wonderful poem and so happy for your honored win. Congratulations and God bless you
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 10/1/2019 8:32:00 AM
Thank you Regina! Bless you :) xomo
Date: 9/30/2019 5:05:00 PM
congratulations, WOW!! Maureen!!! One out of 35, awesome!!
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 10/1/2019 8:30:00 AM
I'm stunned! Thank you Bobby :))) xomo!
Date: 9/30/2019 5:00:00 PM
Maureen, a big congratulations on your win in Tania's contest with this first and only place, a beautiful write and deserving of a trophy win.
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 10/1/2019 8:29:00 AM
Thank you so much Constance. <3 xomo
Date: 9/30/2019 4:55:00 PM
Congrats, Maureen. This is indeed a perfect love poem. Finally your very first post obtains the recognition is well deserves.
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 10/1/2019 8:27:00 AM
Thank you so much Line. It is my favourite, and I feel my best. xomo <3
Date: 9/30/2019 4:50:00 PM
Maureen, congratulations on your trophy win. I love this poem, I read it several times and each time I was captivated by it!
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 10/1/2019 8:22:00 AM
Oh Wow, thank you Tania! I'm thrilled, and honoured that you love it so. This piece is so close to my heart. It is a moment in my life that is seared into my memory, and this poem the door, one of my highest highs during my lowest of lows. Hugs!!! xomo
Date: 3/3/2019 3:12:00 PM
I thought I would go and read your first post.. Interesting use of metaphor...
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 10/1/2019 8:14:00 AM
<3
Date: 9/28/2018 1:50:00 AM
I am working backwards tonight, and what a nice beautiful poem!!!!
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 9/28/2018 6:22:00 AM
Aw thank you Arthur. This one is my favourite. xomo
Date: 6/2/2018 10:51:00 AM
Dear Maureen, Welcome to the Soup Family with this Treasured POETIC Tapestry I shall read More of YOUR Quill. Love ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Liege...HG
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 6/2/2018 11:10:00 AM
You're so kind HG! Thank you for gracing my page! Butter fingers I deleted your response to my cake poem :) xomo!
Date: 4/10/2018 9:39:00 AM
Woe....this poem is fantastico. I think it is fascinating and very deep. I had to read a few times. My perception of what you are telling the reader, may be something entirely separate from what you are conveying. In my favourites. For later discussion.
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 4/10/2018 11:05:00 AM
Uh oh ;) <3
Date: 2/24/2018 11:46:00 AM
Bonsoir Maureen! I've taken you up on your invitation to "comment", or rather read your first post in PS, but first - rather than pose as someone who has "something to say" - I'd rather beg for your permission to ask questions about your poem in order to elucidate certain notions I entertain on a first reading, for it's a poem that operates on several levels by my reckoning. In other words, I'm inviting you to a discussion which might be of mutual benefit at unraveling. Over to you. Wignesan
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T Wignesan
Date: 2/24/2018 10:17:00 PM
Thanks for the authorisation to begin the interrogation. (I'm having problems with my internet connection, so expect interruptions.I'll have to be brief.) Q1. Did you deliberately choose the image of the swift to serve the theme (at least at one level) to encase and highlight your own feelings of "complications" at the confessional level of representation of "guilt" feelings in your poem? Q2. To whom are you addressing your sentiments: the "swift" or to your own persona in the poem? Wignesan
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 2/24/2018 1:24:00 PM
Certainly. Soup mail away.
Date: 11/30/2017 7:08:00 AM
Enjoyed reading your work..I remember when they got in our chimney and I did not know that they had made it their home..My daughter was out on a date and when they came in she said that there were bats out there..It wasn't bats..We put a cover over the chimney at night and the next morning built a fire then moved the cover off and they all flew out.When the fire went out we covered the chimney so they would not come back until we could fix it another way..Sara
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/30/2017 7:43:00 AM
Giggle, I don't know if I wouldn't have given them the chimney :) Thank you for the lovely visits! Much love mo xo
Date: 11/17/2017 10:38:00 PM
Oh my God! I so love this Maureen! What a great and inspired first write here on PS. A jewel in your poetic crown!
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 11/17/2017 11:28:00 PM
Thank you Susan, this piece is so near and dear to my heart, I'm warmed by your response to it... I think it is my crown jewel :) A lovely evening (?) to you dear xomo!
Date: 4/5/2017 9:24:00 AM
I decided to visit your first poem here, and I am so impressed. What a wonderful poiem this is. 7 and fav for me!
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 4/5/2017 9:41:00 AM
Thank You Darren, that means a lot to me. Take care dear. xomo
Date: 3/19/2017 9:12:00 AM
I enjoyed reading this one again.
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Date: 2/12/2017 9:50:00 PM
Love this Maureen !! ~~~Jeanie~~~
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Date: 2/9/2017 9:15:00 AM
Your poem is delicious soup. Well done. Solomon
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 2/10/2017 3:14:00 PM
Thank you Solomon :)
Date: 2/5/2017 2:24:00 PM
A terrific pen here Maureen
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 2/10/2017 3:15:00 PM
Thank you! :)
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