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Children's Hospital

childrens' ward in a recovery room dad survives the guilt 2/27/18

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 3/13/2018 6:11:00 AM

A sad moment of time. I know a family that lost their five year old daughter to cancer. Every year you can feel the chill, the loss. The most difficult.

Sneha Rv

Date: 3/1/2018 10:17:00 PM

Oh what a thought-provoking Haiku! (I know very little right of these two forms ~ but could this be a senryu? I have heard they are on human nature and folly) :)

Reason A. Poteet
Date: 3/2/2018 7:00:00 PM

I sent a soup mail to the host and asked whether she wanted that distinction made. She didn't answer my question. Deborah said: "I enjoy both traditional and contemporary haiku. I generally write contemporary Haiku as I prefer the shorter "one breath" moment." Based on the winners she chose, I think she, like myself, lumps them all together as modern haiku. Appreciate your read and response, Sneha. Wish you the best in all you write. Host: Deborah Beachboard.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 2/28/2018 10:42:00 AM

You made everyone think, searching for meaning. Dad always hurts when his child suffers..guilty or not..I like the way your poem invites interpretation, RAP.

Reason A. Poteet
Date: 3/1/2018 10:11:00 AM

A car accident in particular but as you say the interpretation is open. Thanks Vijay appreciate your time and energy

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/28/2018 7:37:00 AM

- Not the children's fault ... the adults must take the blame - Well written, R.A.P. - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Reason A. Poteet
Date: 3/1/2018 10:06:00 AM

Hopefully a wake up moment which will be resolved by better habits and care in driving. Appreciate your interaction with this piece

Silent One

Date: 2/28/2018 7:17:00 AM

Interesting, so dad caused the pain?

Reason A. Poteet
Date: 2/28/2018 7:20:00 AM

that's one way to read it; at least in his mind and likely inadvertently. Thanks for the read, Silent.

Janis Thompson

Date: 2/27/2018 5:41:00 PM

A must read over and over and then think on. Great haiku structure.

Reason A. Poteet
Date: 2/28/2018 4:11:00 AM

Thank you, Sian, pondering is the magic of haiku, in my opinion.

Heidi Sands

Date: 2/27/2018 2:58:00 PM

A powerful Haiku! well done :)

Reason A. Poteet
Date: 2/28/2018 4:10:00 AM

thanks, Heidi, I appreciate your point. PS: contemporary haiku is not always about nature, nor 5,7,5 in structure. Views about haiku range widely in the US as well as Japan.