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Example for my contest...This is my first try at this form, I do hope it's right...lol 

Child

From her womb...come birth
A child...a new life 
His first sound...a cry 
His first sight.... his mom 
His first feel...mom's arms
 
His breath...so soft 
Small toes...wee feet 
His nose...so cute 
His ears, he hears... 

Love you, son 
Lift your eyes 
See the light 

Come ere
To life 

Child
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Barden Avatar
January 26, 2019 at 1:54 AM
This is wonderful, Charlie, and a great form - I just noticed that it received Poem of the Day as well - congratulations! I have NEVER tried this form but just did, and I have to say, it was a LOT of fun, and I'm going to write more, (and maybe my next contest). Thank you for introducing me to it, my friend - I hope I do it some justice, as you have here. Blessings! :-)
One Avatar
January 19, 2019 at 3:24 PM
Great to see you getting potd... Congrats.
Messina Avatar
January 20, 2019 at 8:20 AM
Thank you, SO :)
Marcum Wong Avatar
January 19, 2019 at 3:18 PM
I love this tender poem Charlie. Congratulations on your deserving POTD honors. : ) xxoo
Messina Avatar
January 20, 2019 at 8:21 AM
Thank you, Connie :)
Devonshire Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 8:23 PM
What a lovely diminished hexaverse, Charlie. Congratulations on your POTD -- so well deserved. And this is a fine example for your contest. Hugs, Carolyn
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 10:04 PM
Thank you, Carolyn. Hoping to see yours :) Hugs
Raven Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 6:03 PM
Hi Charlie, dropping by with my congratulations on your poem of the day honour with this wonderful poem. have a wonderful Saturday....Mike.
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 10:02 PM
Hey Mike, thank you for your kind words and your visit. Have a nice weekend my friend!
La France Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 5:28 PM
Charlie, congratulations on having your sweet poem selected as Poem of the Day, enjoy the honor ~
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 10:00 PM
Thank you, Constance. These don't come around that often for me, so much enjoying the ride. :)
Nicole Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 4:37 PM
Awe, Charlie. This is so sweet and tender. Beautiful moments of a mother and her child. Life! Your thoughts caress softly around me and my heart. Congratulations on Poem of the Day. :) Brandy
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 10:00 PM
Thank you, Brandy. So happy to warm your heart! :)
Y. Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 4:36 PM
Hi Charlie, You have captured the feeling of a proud mom upon the arrival of her baby boy! Excellent job. Congratulations on getting the poem of the day. It was well deserved:-) Alexis
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:58 PM
Thank you, Alexis. And for your kind words :)
Roper Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 4:23 PM
Nicely done, Charles, congratulations on POTD... Hugs Eve
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:57 PM
Thank you, Eve :) Hugs!
Kitchin Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 4:13 PM
Awesome, congratulations on POTD!
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:57 PM
Thank you, Tania :)
Dutta Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 11:29 AM
CONGRATS. Best Wishes.
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:57 PM
Thank you, Anisha
Vangaveti Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 11:03 AM
Congratulations on POTD. A truly deserving one. :) Sweet and simple. :)
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:56 PM
Thank you, Swetha :)
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January 18, 2019 at 9:37 AM
Sweet - Congratulations!
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:56 PM
Thank you, SW :)
Sands Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:12 AM
Congratulations for POTD! :)
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:56 PM
Thank you, Heidi :)
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January 18, 2019 at 8:19 AM
Just beautiful! Congrats on POTD!
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:55 PM
Thank you, Kim :)
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January 18, 2019 at 8:14 AM
Wonderful! Congratulations on POTD Charlie! xomo :)
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:55 PM
Thank you, Mo :) xocm
Pandit Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 7:54 AM
Congrats Charles on poem of the day..so well deserved!
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:55 PM
Thank you, Vijay
Warrior Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 7:52 AM
Charles my friend...Awesome! DH...no greater love than a Mother & child...Congrats!!! on POTD! ...love & light...^WW^
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:54 PM
Thank you, WW. I agree with you on that...Love & peace!
Gentile Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 7:27 AM
This is such a beautiful POTD, Congratulations!
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:53 PM
Thank you, Mike. And for your kind words!
Smith Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 6:54 AM
Congratulations for POTD honors, well done...
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:52 PM
Thank you, Charlie
May Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 6:53 AM
Congrats on POTD Charles..
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:52 PM
Thank you, Joseph
Rushing Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 6:31 AM
Congratulations Charles on POTD!
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:51 PM
Thank you, Wren
Ibeh Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 6:00 AM
So proud to see this excellent write win POTD! Congratulations, Charles!:-) Well-deserved!
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:51 PM
Wow, was I surprised when I saw this. Thanks again, Edward, I couldn't have done it without your help :) Much obliged...Charlie
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January 18, 2019 at 4:29 AM
- Lovely poem, Charlie - Congratulations on your p.o.t.d. :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:48 PM
Thank you, Anne-Lise :) Hugs Charlie
Cunningham Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 1:24 AM
A form I've never heard of ( I'm still learning lol) Congratulations on POTD Charlie. Tom.
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2019 at 9:48 PM
Thank you, Tom (As I am too...lol)
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