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Cheramoya My Bride

Outlining your face, wisps of gorgeous hair
Within those wisps, beauty of no compare
Adorning your face, the most beautiful smile
Sometimes I forget, you have been mine all the while

Deeper still two jewels for eyes
And in them care with no compromise
Love sparkling from inside
Sometimes my love I did hide

Anchoring your persona, two ears most sensitive
All they have heard, considered most substantive
And jewelry fades against lobes so tender
Sometimes my time I have forgotten to render

Creation perfection, lips of the greatest allure
Words of kindness of love are spoken so pure
Soft and luscious, they summon my soul
Sometimes I conceal, your love is my goal

Contemplating your beauty, I consider no flaw
I gaze in adornment, full of hope and awe
Pondering your love, it has enriched my life
Sometimes I must proclaim, I love my wife

Copyright © Ijm Seven | Year Posted 2016

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Phillip Garcia Date: 8/30/2016 9:38:00 AM I read the beautiful senryu you just posted prior to this and I incorrectly brought that mindset here and couldn't understand why there were so many words! I got realigned though and really enjoyed the poem. The second stanza stood out, obviously and it flows well but I'm curious (strictly curious not critical) why those particular words broke away from the rest into sort of a Shakespearian rhythm. It's very likely I'm just not deep enough to see it but I can claim geographical handicaps Login to Reply Phillip Garcia Date: 8/31/2016 11:04:00 AM I understand that completely and I promise wasn't critical (in truth I prefer that kind of rhythm) I was just curious. It's excellent as it is - I I know the hell that is re-evaluation and I wouldn't wish that on you :) Ijm Seven Date: 8/30/2016 6:19:00 PM you bring up a good point Phillip. Over the years of writing poetry I have mainly written when inspired. As of late, I am working on the discipline of poetry. Writing from the heart is a good start but often requires time to consider, edit, and alteration. I did not take the time to to such with this poem. I thank you for your comment and I will re-evaluate the second stanza.