cheat on the sweet

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How well do you know your partner
(With a twist) Poetry Contest
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08/07/25

           sometimes lovers meet
        kiss and share a bite to eat
           one desires sweetmeat
         not dessert  an extra treat
           to savour another’s teat

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Duke Beaufort

Date: 7/11/2025 1:17:00 PM

David, quite a twist indeed. There's definitely a lot of different desires in our minds and you explore that in a very clever way. Take care and smiles!!

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/11/2025 2:17:00 PM

Heya Duke! we’re only human! that’s my excuse anyway, I needed a good twist for this one, I’m sure this scenario would never play out in real life lol! Cheers David

Ink Empress

Date: 7/11/2025 7:18:00 AM

Clever rhymes in your tanka dear david! You have a way with words! Sometimes yea lovers share so much that the world might not be able to comprehend lol! I prefer dessert specifically chocolate, as a chocoholic! Pleasure visiting you today: sending you light always

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/11/2025 8:14:00 AM

Heya Ink, we all have our weaknesses, life is full of temptation! And I have a penchant for +70% dark chocolate, I think the character in my tanka had something more sinful in mind lol! Thanks so much for stopping by, cheers David

Terry Flood

Date: 7/9/2025 3:36:00 PM

Well, I’ve never seen THAT on the menu. I guess I’ll change venue ;-) We’ll funny, that!

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/10/2025 12:46:00 AM

Haha! I’m pretty sure it was an á la carte choice, possibly the waitress flashing a bit too much lol! Cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 7/8/2025 4:23:00 PM

Oh, you've chosen a cheaters twist~ ha ha ha , GL

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/9/2025 12:51:00 AM

Heya Anaya, Well maybe a wannabe cheater’s twist! such is life when sharing a bite to eat lol! Cheers David

Jan Allison

Date: 7/8/2025 3:17:00 PM

this sure made me smile David - that final line is hilarious! hug Jan xx

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/8/2025 4:18:00 PM

I left a comment, sure is very sad!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/8/2025 3:37:00 PM

posted a deep sad one for me but got a limerick to post for another day! hugs Jan xx

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/8/2025 3:34:00 PM

Heya Jan, I couldn’t resist that last line, lol! So for better or worse it had to stay, thanks so much for stopping by, cheers David