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Voice Poetry Contest sponsored by Eve Roper

Picture #3 ~ The Tram by Paul Gustave Fischer

September 21, 2023

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I pick up their idle chatter five days of the week. Conversation with other passengers, I never seek to learn of a secret one of them might privately leak. But try as I might, I cannot help but overhear a new recipe she tried, or the reason for his fear. Sometimes, I wish I was deaf, at least in one ear! I try reading my newspaper and ignore the prattle, but often it's louder than the train car's rattle. I'm not interested in the gossip of their tittle tattle. At least the man with the cigar, smokes it outside, or I'd take another tram. Cigar stench I can't abide. I live in the burbs, so it's a long way home I ride. Today, there's a young lady who wouldn't take a seat. She looks worried, or at least somewhat browbeat, like the people I work with down at Dun & Bradstreet. I often wonder what's on the young conductor's mind. Does he despise his job because he feels confined? I'm off at the next stop, where I leave them all behind.

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Sotto Poet

Date: 9/25/2023 6:31:00 AM

Congratulations on your trophy win, Lin. Your poem is so well composed and the scene is so well portrayed.

Eve Roper

Date: 9/24/2023 8:23:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Lin. Great descriptive with emotion poem. Many blessings

Lin Lane
Date: 9/25/2023 4:02:00 AM

Good morning, Eve and thank you for honoring my entry.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 9/22/2023 2:26:00 AM

Very well explained, Lin, you gave him voice:)

Lin Lane
Date: 9/22/2023 2:33:00 AM

Thanks so much, Jo. I’m not sure why I chose to give him the voice. Thoughts of what he’d be thinking just started filling my head. Lol

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/22/2023 2:12:00 AM

Hi Lin, You painted such a good image of a passenger on a train. Your gifted pen gave life to the scene. It was like I was a passenger too. Top-notch content and rhymes. Best of luck in the contest. Outstanding job:-)Alexis

Lin Lane
Date: 9/22/2023 2:16:00 AM

Alexis, your review started my morning with s smile at your kind thoughts. Thank you ever so much.

Bill Baker

Date: 9/21/2023 3:41:00 PM

You made me feel like I was back riding the rails to and from work again. That was thirty years ago. Nice entry for the contest, Lin. Your normal fine rhyming and the poem flowed well. It was smooth reading. Good luck in the contest, my friend. Bill

Lin Lane
Date: 9/21/2023 4:05:00 PM

Thanks ever so much for your compliment and your well wishes, Bill.

Jeff Connelly

Date: 9/21/2023 9:53:00 AM

Picture and poetically perfect Lin. Thanks

Lin Lane
Date: 9/21/2023 2:20:00 PM

Thank you so very much, Jeff.

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 9/21/2023 5:23:00 AM

Wonderful story, poem... enjoyed. Wishing you a win. God bless you, Love, Gina

Lin Lane
Date: 9/21/2023 2:20:00 PM

Thanks so much, Gina. I'm so glad you like it. I already know you are blessed. You have a happy smile.

Jan Allison

Date: 9/21/2023 5:20:00 AM

You portrayed the scene in the picture so perfectly. I didnt need to see the image to imagine the conversations taking place and can almost smell the cigar fumes. hugs jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 9/21/2023 2:19:00 PM

Thanks, Jan. I couldn't see any of the pictures Eve posted at first, but when I saw this one yesterday, it was almost like I could hear what that man was thinking. Hate cigar stink, but I love a good smelling pipe tobacco.