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Chastity Vow- Double Tanka

Full and luscious lips
Tempting treat to hungry eye
Flashback memories
Hot lips in constant pursuit
Now chastity vow taken

Other lips await
Longing to explore and claim
Willing travelers     
Virgin lips in cherry red
Chastity vow forgotten

Eileen Manassian Ghali

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Poet Destroyer A Date: 8/13/2013 3:40:00 PM You write well Eileen, enjoyed both tanka's... xox...Linda Login to Reply

Danesh Morgan Date: 8/11/2013 7:23:00 PM I was not 'advising' as you put it, merely being coy with punt intended, I can never advise nor do i have the qualification or command of poetry to. . . my humble apology if it sound like one, one can be on the side of error, in fact this is one of my favourite poems so it is very tastefully done . thank you Login to Reply

Richard D Seal Date: 8/1/2013 1:26:00 PM I'd say don't delete this. If you're a writer, then sometimes you will be controversial, that is what writing is about, bringing out thoughts and idea's, Testing beliefs. Login to Reply

Richard D Seal Date: 8/1/2013 1:23:00 PM My point on this one is that very few of grow next to the first flower we find in the meadow. We have all given our undying love to someone, in a way a chastity vow, only to discover it didn't work out. In marriage I do agree with this but even then many reasons come along to change that. Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 8/1/2013 8:55:00 AM A little controversy! From a guys perspective I do not now feel a sudden urge to seek out a virgin and corrupt her. There is value in chastity and waiting for that special guy or gal. Sadly we live in a highly sexulized society and many young people discard this gift with far to little consideration. Many don't fully understand what they are giving away. The poem is provocative but not offensive. I know your heart and you explore all emotions. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 8/1/2013 3:29:00 PM No I think good art results in conversation, also my comments are not a criticism, rather a reflection of how the words impacted me. Often people take meanings based on personal experience. Eileen Manassian Date: 8/1/2013 9:06:00 AM Richard.....YOU KNOW MY HEART....Yes, I accept your comments for that reason. I think this poem was taken all out of context. I tried to explain....I tried...It's about husbands who forget to kiss with passion...to kiss with the love that they once felt.....making THEIR OWN LIPS take a chastity vow of NOT having INTERCOURSE (Kissing) with their wives..Yet...her lips are longing for that...and are ready for that...He can easily push her away....Oh dear....shall I delete this?

Danesh Morgan Date: 8/1/2013 12:48:00 AM a beautiful metaphor, the hidden message is clear, to declare it out is not wise, where mens eyes are searching! need i say more. . . . ? Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 8/1/2013 1:13:00 AM Danesh....no, in fact, perhaps you need to say less. This is the second time you try to "advise" me on the content of what I write. I think as a 46 year old woman, I should be allowed the liberty to post what I feel is appropriate for me. I do take counsel from friends; however, you do not know me, nor my background to qualify for this advice. I'm sorry if this sounds harsh, but the wisdom in deciding what I share...how much of myself I share...is not up to questioning. Perhaps on another day I would have taken your post different, but today is not one of those...Need I say more?

Poet Tacito Date: 7/31/2013 10:25:00 PM Hm...this is deep. We value those simple pleasures (IE: the power of a kiss), yet we want to maintain boundaries for the sake of self-respect, etc. Yet, that same kiss can also overpower us, when our walls are down and our souls just beg to give in. Ah, the teeter-totter of love & lust. Nicely done! Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 8/1/2013 1:05:00 AM There are a lot of things which work to strengthen those walls, Drake...The need for love and belonging is one of the basic needs on Maslow's hierarchy....they MUST be met....one way or another....thanks for stopping by! :)

Karen Anglesey Date: 7/31/2013 6:32:00 PM Whew! Sensual and lucious....sizzling lines that make the poem speak ..:) Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 8/1/2013 1:04:00 AM Why thank you, Karen...this kind of post is more than welcome! Hugs!

Richard D Seal Date: 7/31/2013 5:19:00 PM Well, I can imagine you getting through some lips Auntie, and it sounds like you don't give a damn lol. Cute tanka's but not sure on the moral. I need help Auntie, am confused lol, Take care, Richard Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 8/1/2013 2:09:00 AM The chastity vow was just a literary device I used for lips who no longer want to engaged in "intercourse" with other lips....It is SOLEY a reference to lips.... Richard D Seal Date: 8/1/2013 1:58:00 AM Yes Crystal, Though chastiy vow can be something different to marriage but I see what you mean in this now. Anyway, Bravo for to silly boy lol Eileen Manassian Date: 8/1/2013 1:03:00 AM The moral of the poem? Simple and clear....A clarion plea to husband to kiss their wives with the passion they kissed them with when they were their girlfriends...SIMPLE and clear...otherwise...they may regret it! Is that crystal clear? Eileen Manassian Date: 8/1/2013 1:01:00 AM MMMMMMMM.....Mr Seal. You must know, my dear...that to know how much of a written work is fiction and how much real is something that the reader can NEVER ascertain. Your imagination runs wild.....The only lips to have tasted mine are my husbands. Oh...and one silly boy who at Christmas thought he'd plant a quick one on me before I had a chance to react. So....I guess your imagination is in the wrong on this one! ;)