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Change of Outlook

How ireful the noise of days’ lecture Endlessly testing my patience bare— And as I watch corollas of early moon Flicker under an obscure skyline ; I linger on to await the eerie frenzy On a congested Highway 106: The small dipper winks kindly Where a certain piousness flows Against the growls of angry horns-- That somehow, I begin to launder My habitual ramblings and change them Into one light of stillness --to savor Breath’s rhythmic, free-flowing movement When duskfall gifts me tolerance. For John Hamilton's Best Free Verse April 1, 2018 to July 15,2018 Contest ---------------------- Originally written 4/25/2018 Entered 7/14/2018

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Date: 7/15/2018 1:53:00 PM
Back to congratulate you again on your win again. Still in awe. :)
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Date: 7/14/2018 8:00:00 PM
Congratulations on your awesome win and well crafted write . Hugs Eve
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Date: 7/14/2018 11:56:00 AM
Another write, another win Nette, congrats again!
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Date: 5/12/2018 9:27:00 AM
oh that really does paint a picture well stephen
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Date: 5/5/2018 3:01:00 AM
Congratulations, Nette on your fine win." When duskfall gifts me tolerance" .. nicely said.
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Date: 5/4/2018 8:54:00 PM
Well done, nette. Congrats on your podium win.
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Date: 5/4/2018 1:09:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this spectacular poem of change. I am in awe of your poetic expressions.
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Date: 5/4/2018 7:16:00 AM
..."when duskfall gifts me tolerance"...Love that final line Nette, well done....thanks for entering the contest.
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Date: 4/25/2018 8:38:00 AM
As always your words shine.
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Date: 4/24/2018 5:39:00 PM
I love the image of laundering one's ramblings and transforming them. Great poem, nette.
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Date: 4/24/2018 3:07:00 PM
A small dipper to the rescue..after a busy day..as you elegantly put it...Breath’s rhythmic movement When duskfall gifts me tolerance...I feel the transformation, nette.
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Date: 4/24/2018 2:35:00 PM
Okay, I seem to repeat the same grouchy pattern each chance I get. Perfect illustration of attitudinal shift; rating this A+
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Date: 4/24/2018 2:11:00 PM
- A poetic way to describe a busy day, Nette - Take care :) - (not a contest poem? :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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