Caution - Fireworks

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E-Z Glo Punk, Lightning Flash,
TNT Devices will burst, do crash
Southern Night, Piccolo Petes
       are hard to beat...

I like hand held Sparklers, Tanks
 flashing fountains, Solar Flare
 Six to #20 Gold I have to share,
 no incidence, no burns, thanks...

  Whistles blow, fountains glow,
 pop'n sounds, entire sky all aglow
 I love those colors, high an low
  trails eched onto my retina
  inspired me to let ya know

  Now you close both eyes
in pitch dark, what a surprise
  for you to see, right there
 darkness, absolutely  anywhere
beautiful trails of lights in motion
 
"Always read a label of caution"

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/23/2013 9:26:00 PM

Hi Perry, I'll take your advice, -give the no THE in my poems a shot:-) LOL, well I will try to use them less. Like the poem above. I like the flow. I wrote a poem called (HANDS). I tried so hard in not using THE, so much.... I had to use many MY's , cause it's a poem I read out loud, and it should read as if I am speaking to an audience. I hope you like it. It is long, but, It is one of my favorites so far. I love the poem. stop by when you have the chance. Look out for the caution sign.