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Catching Sight of Our Bay

Against a dome where moonlight gleams, bushes quiver and clear waters drift -- that in this land of the pine where forest trails meet, I descry the mystic bay slither with intimacies of our lost youth, of our love breathing: The evening climbs as if I need not grow old-- for dreams take me back, memorizing how we rolled through the fields, down through the vine. Quietly , I discover the wonder that flows from our town river, shimmering once more. With the thrill of a new dawn , yesteryear’s affection lures me where I still belong ... while you, my dear fade behind night’s shadows. Rob Carmack's Contest: Decry 5/24/2017

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Date: 6/24/2017 11:54:00 AM
Congratulations, nette: Very emotional
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Date: 6/21/2017 7:27:00 PM
You describe the Welsh concept of hiraeth, a longing for home, based on how it was when you grew up there. In your memories it is still the same; but it's probably best not to go back for it likely has changed. Congratulations, nette, a quality piece inspired by "descry".
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Date: 6/21/2017 11:06:00 AM
Beautiful and bittersweet, Sandra--CONGRATS on your win! Janice
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Date: 6/21/2017 11:11:00 AM
NETTE, not Sandra! Sorry about that. Janice
Date: 6/21/2017 1:29:00 AM
This is a great write. Painful memories and makes me sad. Emotions galore in that river. Many wishes, Kai
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Date: 6/21/2017 12:49:00 AM
simply fantastic, Nette. Congrats!
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Date: 6/21/2017 12:34:00 AM
What a beautiful muse.
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Date: 6/5/2017 4:23:00 AM
Another splendid write from your pen Nette. I always thank God for memories. Best of luck in the contest. : )
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Date: 5/24/2017 9:47:00 PM
Your writing always plays with my emotions Nette. I am left smiling with a gentle touch of melancholy.
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Date: 5/24/2017 5:14:00 PM
Beautiful... like always, Nette, good luck in the contest. ~*
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Date: 5/24/2017 3:38:00 PM
Love the first line of this beautiful write Nette..Best wishes
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Date: 5/24/2017 2:37:00 PM
- Love is always young ... a beautiful poem, Nette :) - Luck in the contest - happy hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/24/2017 2:17:00 PM
"slither with intimacies" I love this image! it almost makes it seem unappealing.. Good luck in the contest! Love, Juli-Michelle
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Date: 5/24/2017 1:25:00 AM
Astonishing weave of past glimpses that still ' breathe' in this poem. The whole mood makes me speechless!
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Date: 5/23/2017 4:35:00 PM
Beautiful...what else can I say. So very beautiful Nette. Your heart seems to be in touch with everything you write.
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Date: 5/23/2017 4:22:00 PM
a solemn reflection of what was and is the world you inhabit in gentle tones, like the soft strings from a violin..good luck
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Date: 5/23/2017 4:13:00 PM
Wow Nette...what a beautiful poem! :)
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