Jadazzle United Poet Rhyme

Castles In the Air

I hear the rustling of the trees
Echoes of knights riding on the breeze
Sent from the castle in the clouds
Trying to calm the baying crowds.
In that Camelot high above
Kingdom of the god of love
The evil of man puts him to the test
His tormented angels cannot rest 

Trapped inside her ivory tower
She prays for rescue hour on hour
High castle walls her deadly foes
Cut off from everything she knows
Hoping that her prince will come
And to his charms she may succumb
She hopes her prince rescues her soon
Breaks down the door of her locked room 

The god of love hears her desperate plea
He remembers well the days of chivalry
When knights in armour fought to protect the poor
He will send such a knight to batter down that door.
Love will replace his sword and lance
For love unlocks the doors to true romance
Thus the god of love grants the damsels wish
Smiling as she and her knight engage in loves first kiss.

Contest:- Partner Up
Sponsor:- Shadow Hamilton

Written By Jadazzle United – Jan Allison and Darren Watson
18th August 2015

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Carol Eastman September 9, 2015 at 1:10 PM When you two get together any thing great can and does happen. Congrats on the win! Jadazzle United September 11, 2015 at 4:55 PM Thanks so much Carol it is wonderful to be writing together again:-) Hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian September 9, 2015 at 2:29 AM Congrats, sweetie on this amazing write between two amazing poets! :) Oh....romance....I do love it. I can see why it did so well. Hugs to you both. Jadazzle United September 11, 2015 at 4:55 PM Thanks so much Eileen I adore writing with Darren and Jadazzle truly are reunited:-) hugs jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma September 9, 2015 at 1:12 AM Wonderful collab Jan and Darren! Congrats on superb win! Jadazzle United September 11, 2015 at 4:54 PM Thanks so much Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France September 8, 2015 at 7:11 PM Jan and Darren, congratulations on a wonderful win in the Castle contest with this gem of a poem, and thanks for visiting my collaboration castle poem written with Eric . . . Jadazzle United September 11, 2015 at 4:54 PM Thanks so much Broken Wings this contest couldn't have come at a better time - Darren got back in touch just days after it had been posted it was simply meant to be we would write together again:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus September 8, 2015 at 4:17 PM I had no doubt that this romantic collaboration would fly high on the winners' list! Congratulations:) Hugs // paul Jadazzle United September 8, 2015 at 4:31 PM Thanks Paul I can't wait to tell Darren he will be over the moon:-) hugs Jan xxx

Shadow Hamilton September 8, 2015 at 10:25 AM congrats Jan and Darren fine pen hugs Jadazzle United September 8, 2015 at 11:39 AM The timing of your contest was perfect Shadow ...just a few days later Darren appeared back in my life and to write together again has been a dream come true:-) hugs Jan xx

Skat A September 8, 2015 at 8:47 AM Jadazzle, Congratulations on your - Partner up - contest win. **SKAT** Jadazzle United September 8, 2015 at 11:38 AM Thanks Skat Jadazzle are finally reunited:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. September 7, 2015 at 11:40 PM Jan, you and Darren penned a good collab. Congratulations on your win:-) Alexis Jadazzle United September 8, 2015 at 11:38 AM Many thanks Alexis it is so so good to be writing together again:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper September 7, 2015 at 9:10 PM Wonderful write, Jan & Darren, congratulations on your win a 7 Hugs Eve Jadazzle United September 8, 2015 at 11:37 AM Thanks so much Eve the contest came at a brilliant time - it was posted a few days before Darren got in contact with me after a long break:-) hugs Jan xx

Emile Pinet August 24, 2015 at 9:13 AM A wonderful collaboration, your poem takes the essence of dreams of old and distills their magic into a love poem that flaunts reality and entertains us with thoughts of knights and days of chivalry. Emile. Jadazzle United August 24, 2015 at 9:29 AM Thanks Emile it is a joy to be back collaborating with Darren after a year I am just so glad to have my knight in shining armour back in my life:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich August 22, 2015 at 10:25 PM It's such a romantic one, Jan! I love how you guys made a castle poem topic more interesting by adding the romance! you have to tell me who did the different parts. Did you, as the female, do the middle part? I really liked it! Jan Allison August 23, 2015 at 6:42 PM Oh Darren would tie me up and leave me in the tower if I tell who wrote what - knowing Daz of old he would enjoy that lol so I beter hope he doesnt read this comment lol. Seriously Andrea, it is simply a joy to be writing together, the magic is still there - not one word has been changed:-) Hugs Jan xx

Faye Gibson August 22, 2015 at 7:52 PM Love that you all are back together writing. Very nice. Best wishes in the contest. Jadazzle United August 22, 2015 at 7:57 PM Its been over a year since we last wrote together, but I never gave up hope that one day we would be reunited. Darren appeared back in my life on the day my poetry story was broadcast on the local radio station it is almost like we have a telepathy between us - the magic is still there when we write - 5 more poems are in progress!:-) hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso August 22, 2015 at 7:29 PM wow you two are wonderful, this is beautiful! Jadazzle United August 22, 2015 at 7:53 PM Oh Arthur thank you for dropping by - it is a dream come true to be writing together again - we have another 5 poems in the pipeline and the old jadazzle humour will be felt at full force again lol just hope soup is ready for it lol:-) hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian August 22, 2015 at 5:55 PM Wow you two!!! This is the magic of Jadazzle...Simply beautiful. :) I'd love to see the days of chivalry come back. Hugs Jadazzle United August 22, 2015 at 6:12 PM I think Daz would make a wonderful knight in shining armour :-) I think he has an old fashioned charm about him:-) Hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos August 21, 2015 at 5:17 AM Two peas in a podner.....Good Luck in the Contest.... Jadazzle United August 21, 2015 at 4:47 PM lol I like that term Judy:-) hugs Jan xx

Charmaine Chircop August 19, 2015 at 6:39 PM A favourite this is.. I so love this tale, and yes the key that unlocks all is love. Jadazzle United August 21, 2015 at 4:47 PM Charma - Darren always wrote the most beautiful romantic poetry and I it is a dream come true to finally be writing together:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith August 19, 2015 at 12:58 PM Love and chivalry at its finest you two. Good luck Tim Jan Allison August 19, 2015 at 6:24 PM Thanks Tim - we are back creating our magic again - we have got almost 5 poems completed since Darren got back in touch on 5th August - his timing was remarkable his e mail arrived about 30 mins before my radio broadcast - we have an almost telepathic connection to our friendship:-) Having Darren back in my life after such a traumatic period in our lives is the BEST thing to happen this year:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus August 18, 2015 at 5:48 PM Maybe this inspired write is based on castles in the air, but co-writing together in a renewal of old friendship is lovely reality. Good luck and take care!:) // paul Jadazzle United August 18, 2015 at 5:53 PM Just writing together again is simply a dream come true and our friendship is now stronger than ever:-) hugs jan xx

Bill Lindsay August 18, 2015 at 3:07 PM what beautiful symmetry you weave together ... I applaud you both ;) Jadazzle United August 18, 2015 at 3:09 PM oh thank you so much Bill - Darren has been unwell for a long time and we have have only just started writing together again ... all I know is dreams do come true and our friendship is now stronger than ever:-) hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez August 18, 2015 at 2:03 PM Hi Jan! I really am glad to see this newest offer from you and your friend Darren. This write speaks of chivalry and pure romance. Sending you best wishes in the contest... and now I really must go to sleep. Hugs to both of you! Jadazzle United August 18, 2015 at 2:11 PM Kim it is simply wonderful for us to be writing again and from his e mails Darren is going from strength to strength with his recovery... there is more to come from Jadazzle! Darren is a joy to write with - not a single word has been changed:-) hugs jan xx

Jadazzle United August 18, 2015 at 1:31 PM Darren it is a dream come true for us both to be writing together again:-) love and hugs as ever, your friend forever Jan xxx