Jan Allison Poet Couplet

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Castle On a Hill

Perched high atop a secluded tor
Lies the ancient Castle of Paramour

A romantic location hidden from sight
For a rendezvous at the dead of night

Where two lovers meet for a secret tryst
Their passions rise like the morning mist

But no one must discover that they ever meet
For both are married, so they must be discrete

They are unaware there is a heavy price to pay
Once over the threshold… forever they must stay

Trapped in the castle for the rest of their life
Their infidelity brings them eternal strife 

Perched high atop a secluded tor
Lies the ancient Castle of Paramore
Beware of the risk should you enter the door.

Contest Castle on a Hill Sponsored by Nayda Ivette Negron
04~22~16

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Connie Marcum Wong April 18, 2021 at 12:46 AM This has a haunted yet and enchanted feeling to it Jan. Very lovely! Congratulations on your wonderful win. Blessings xxoo Jan Allison April 18, 2021 at 5:40 PM Thanks Connie i am going through my older poems and have found lots to go in Brian's contests:-) hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A May 1, 2016 at 5:53 PM Jan,, Congratulations on your castle on a hill win... love Linda Jan Allison April 18, 2021 at 5:39 PM thanks Linda :-) hugs Jan xx

Moon Flower April 28, 2016 at 8:22 AM That was a deserving win, Jan. Congrats! Jan Allison April 28, 2016 at 10:12 AM Thanks so much Moon flower:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight April 27, 2016 at 4:42 PM Hi Jan, I enjoyed your write. Congratulations on your fine placement in the 'castles' contest. Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison April 28, 2016 at 10:11 AM Thanks Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane April 27, 2016 at 2:00 PM Congratulations on this one, Jan. Well done. Jan Allison April 27, 2016 at 4:03 PM Many thanks Lin:-) hugs Jan xx

Joyce Johnson April 27, 2016 at 1:49 PM Cute little tale. Congratulations. Love, Joyce Jan Allison April 27, 2016 at 1:59 PM Thanks so much Joyce:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May April 27, 2016 at 1:33 PM Congrats on your win Jan Jan Allison April 27, 2016 at 1:59 PM Thanks Joseph - lovely new avatar - so beautiful an image:-) hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath April 27, 2016 at 1:03 PM Congrats on your win with placement my lovely friend. Loved always, bl Jan Allison April 27, 2016 at 1:58 PM Thanks as ever BL:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars April 27, 2016 at 12:57 PM Jan, a lovely poem for the contest, congrats on your placement :)-luloo Jan Allison April 27, 2016 at 1:58 PM thanks LuLoo - lovely pic of you and Nick:-):-) :-) hugs Jan xx

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores April 27, 2016 at 12:43 PM Congratulations Jan on the placement of the contest. Jan Allison April 27, 2016 at 1:57 PM Many thanks for a great contest Nayda - love the stunning spring flowers on your blog:-) hugs jan xx

Vladislav Raven April 27, 2016 at 9:55 AM Hi Jan, your words once more entrance the reader. Yes, once on the road of infidelity it is a trap forever caught in. I followed this one line by line, caught up in your wonderful tale. There are so many traps layed out in the garden of life. A strange castle indeed that does hold the unfaithful behind its walls. An excellent take on the theme Jan. I could see this one doing well in the contest. Good luck. This has to be a 7 and it is a fave. I just Love the flow of the piece. Hugs....Mike. XX Jan Allison April 27, 2016 at 10:04 AM Thanks so much Mike - I think the poem is pretty dark and sad- so much pain is caused by infidelity and often there is no turning back and everything is lost:-( hugs jan xx

Bl Devnath April 23, 2016 at 12:43 PM Beautiful poem read from you. Good luck in the contest. Loved always, bl Jan Allison April 23, 2016 at 4:42 PM Thanks so much BL:-) hugs jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis April 23, 2016 at 7:25 AM The price that one risks to pay for infidelity! Captivating writing dear, Jan! Good luck! Jan Allison April 23, 2016 at 4:42 PM Thanks Demetrios sadly there is often a massive price to pay:-( hugs jan xx

Joanna Daniel April 23, 2016 at 5:22 AM A different take on the theme:) all the best:) Jan Allison April 23, 2016 at 6:32 AM Thanks Jo:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso April 22, 2016 at 10:43 PM Splendid write, a winner! Jan Allison April 23, 2016 at 6:33 AM Just remember once you book in you can never get out ... and the food may be crap lol:-) hugs jan xx

Gordon Mcconnell April 22, 2016 at 4:52 PM Interesting and mysterious piece Jan, nicely penned, blessings and hugs, Gordon Jan Allison April 22, 2016 at 4:53 PM I have no idea where this came from lol... I do worry about my muse Gordon - I just have to go with the flow of my pen:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen April 22, 2016 at 3:11 PM - A lot of history behind high walls - A great poem, Jan - Good luck in the contest! - hugs // Sun :) Jan Allison April 22, 2016 at 3:14 PM Thanks Anne lise - not somewhere I will ever be booking into lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Duncan Chappell April 22, 2016 at 3:11 PM Great write Jan much love xx Jan Allison April 22, 2016 at 3:15 PM Thanks Duncan:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May April 22, 2016 at 2:50 PM The castle of love ...or of love that shouldn't be....Very nicely penned Jan...Thanks for stopping by I enjoyed your comments... Jan Allison April 22, 2016 at 2:51 PM Thanks Jospeh - I think this is one castle to be avoided - i certainly won't be booking in lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Barry Stebbings April 22, 2016 at 11:55 AM Different style for you, Jan but enjoyable read. Jan Allison April 22, 2016 at 11:59 AM I love to write humouorus poems but I have posted many serious poems on here too :-) hugs Jan xx

J. Tudor April 22, 2016 at 11:45 AM I'm so used to your humour, I wasn't expecting this! Nice twist on the contest. J. Jan Allison April 22, 2016 at 11:55 AM Thanks J Tudor I do surprise people occasionally and write a more serious type of poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars April 22, 2016 at 11:23 AM Beautiful Jan..:)-luloo Jan Allison April 22, 2016 at 11:28 AM Thanks LuLoo - but I guess it's not such a good place to visit though lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Stephen Pennell April 22, 2016 at 8:17 AM oh very good jan : stephen Jan Allison April 22, 2016 at 8:18 AM Thanks Stephen - I've not idea where the inspiration came from lol:-) hugs jan xx