Castle On a Hill

I have a castle
on a hill – so high
I can see my beloved from far.
I also see the valley,
and daily lives of my subjects.
My generals can see any enemy ships
from afar.
Still,
I long to live in the valley,
like my subjects. If I can live in the valley,
I will never see my wife cheating on me once again,
or see my soldiers smuggling my treasures.
I want to lie low,
close my eyes, and forget all it means
to be in a real world….

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 5/1/2016 5:51:00 PM
Teddy, Congratulations on your castle on a hill win... love Linda
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 5/2/2016 6:28:00 AM
Thank you so much Linda!!! *^_^* <3
Date: 4/28/2016 8:41:00 AM
Congrats Teddy! Longing to live in the valley...How true!
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/28/2016 10:30:00 AM
Me too, dear friend.... Thank you for your applause!!! :-)
Date: 4/28/2016 8:35:00 AM
Congrats on your placement.
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/28/2016 10:28:00 AM
Thank you Moon Flower!!! *^_^*
Date: 4/27/2016 1:55:00 PM
Interesting view point. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/28/2016 10:26:00 AM
Thanks for your applause Joyce!!! *^_^*
Date: 4/27/2016 1:06:00 PM
Congrats on your win my lovely friend. Loved always, bl
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/28/2016 10:25:00 AM
Thank you so much, BL!!! :-)
Date: 4/27/2016 12:45:00 PM
Congratulations Teddy on the placement of the contest.
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/28/2016 10:24:00 AM
Thank you so much Nayda!!! *^_^*
Date: 4/26/2016 11:25:00 AM
It can be nice living in a castle but sometimes it's like living in an ivory tower until reality strikes! Great poem, my friend, very philosophical! Good luck in the contest! Pandita
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/27/2016 4:13:00 AM
Lol. Thanks for your comment, and enjoying my work Pandita!!! ;-)
Date: 4/20/2016 3:06:00 PM
Makes me wonder how many rulers fe l t like this Teddy. A great entry! ; )
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/20/2016 5:07:00 PM
I wonder too, Connie.... Thank you for enjoying my piece! *^_^*
Date: 4/20/2016 1:16:00 PM
Well written castle on the hill xxxxx
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/20/2016 5:05:00 PM
Thank you for enjoying my work Wendy!!! *^_^*
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