Can-be Beach, Fourth of July

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Poetic Form: Limerick

Inspired: 2024 July 25

Image: Military Salute

Dear, get me a cocktail, ... those fruity ones, Me with no glasses, ... No miss, errs or runs, saluting sounds of conscience smoking fumes are obnoxious he strayed, two sunbathed girls, "Dears, it's the guns."

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/19/2024 2:08:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Hilo. Hope things are going well for you

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/20/2024 10:43:00 PM

Great Andrea, and many thanks. San Jose turned out to be a nice replacement for Rio. West coast really nice, enjoying. Aloha William

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/18/2024 2:42:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your creative Limerick write. Great Picture.... Have a fun day writing away....................

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/18/2024 5:07:00 PM

Be it a surprise--not if rise as a gift from the prize, thanks Paula. Aloha William

Tania Kitchin

Date: 8/18/2024 9:13:00 AM

William, congratulations on your winning placement with your creative limerick.

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/18/2024 5:14:00 PM

Most inherently generous of you, Tania, keep your gift for the many who'll call you for the need of it. Aloha William