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A fictional write!

Today I saw a pesky fly He buzzed around all day … Until he landed on my lunch So I zapped him with fly spray! Now you’re really in the sky Rest in peace little fly Jan Allison 9th November 2014

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Joel Thornton

Date: 12/10/2014 7:12:00 AM

LOL.. this is cute and clever.. good job.!~Joel

Jan Allison
Date: 12/10/2014 8:05:00 AM

Thanks Joel:-) Hugs Jan xx

Emily Hinchman

Date: 11/12/2014 7:59:00 PM

Very funny, great poem!!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/12/2014 8:01:00 PM

Thanks Emily:-) Hugs Jan xx

Fabiyas M V

Date: 11/11/2014 7:39:00 AM

Well done, Jane

Jan Allison
Date: 11/11/2014 7:53:00 AM

Thanks Fabias:-) hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/10/2014 5:06:00 PM

Did you even try to fictitiously resuscitate the fly?

Jan Allison
Date: 11/10/2014 5:14:00 PM

no lol:-) hugs Jan x

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/10/2014 4:45:00 PM

Did you even try to resuscitate the fly?

Jan Allison
Date: 11/10/2014 4:56:00 PM

Maurice ... it's fiction ... so no lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/10/2014 4:44:00 PM

Great write! (Except for the part where the poor fly dies.) Hope this does well in the the dead bug contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/10/2014 4:52:00 PM

If i run a contest maybe I could submit this write and give myself first place:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/10/2014 4:41:00 PM

If you pull the wings off a fly does it become a walk.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/10/2014 4:51:00 PM

ha ha ha:-) you should be on the stage my friend:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/10/2014 4:39:00 PM

Good you said this is fiction. Other wise I would have to report you to the animal cruelty association. Why does everyone keep saying I hope you didn't eat the sandwich. Bug spray makes a great sandwich spread and how did everyone know your lunch was a sandwich. Poor fly will their be a service I would like to attend.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/10/2014 4:50:00 PM

Lol Maurice thanks for dropping by:-) Hugs jan xx

M. L. Kiser

Date: 11/10/2014 2:01:00 PM

I'm crack'in up!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/10/2014 2:18:00 PM

LOl M L :-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/10/2014 6:06:00 AM

this happens especially during summer in my country... a fun, winsome write, jan.. spray away!.. huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 11/10/2014 7:44:00 AM

lol I prefer flies to wasps lol -this was merely a fun write - nof fun for the poor fly of course! Hugs Jan x

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/10/2014 12:49:00 AM

I hope you didn't eat the sandwich *lol*.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/10/2014 1:12:00 AM

Its pure fun write Richard:-) Although death isn't a fun subject!!!!! hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/9/2014 11:23:00 PM

hahahaha. Is this also a metaphor for something else?? I really LIKES it.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/10/2014 1:11:00 AM

LOl No Andrea ... but it could be!!! Hugs Jan xxx

Eve Roper

Date: 11/9/2014 6:39:00 PM

Ha ha.... good for you Jan, I hope the sandwich ended up in the trash :) love and hugs dear friend eve

Jan Allison
Date: 11/10/2014 1:09:00 AM

Its just a fun write lol Hugs jan xx

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 11/9/2014 6:26:00 PM

I hope you didn't eat that sandwich lol

Jan Allison
Date: 11/10/2014 1:09:00 AM

It's total fiction Brenda:-) lol Hugs jan xx

Robert Stoner Jr

Date: 11/9/2014 5:39:00 PM

Great write sometimes the least says the most. Much enjoyed

Jan Allison
Date: 11/9/2014 5:41:00 PM

Thanks so much Robert:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 11/9/2014 4:52:00 PM

Very entertaining, Jan! I suppose a fly on lunch becomes 'luncheon meat'. Now, how come we go hunting flies and afterwards we feel sorry for them!!! Sentimentalists! hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 11/9/2014 4:54:00 PM

Oh wish I'd had a fly swatter when we were on Gozo Paul - oh the flies were in full force when we were sitting outside eating :-( Hugs Jan xx

James Fraser

Date: 11/9/2014 4:45:00 PM

Mm, buzz off or splat, it means the same. But the Sandwich down the drain - I'm smiling because I'm not a Fly :) xx

James Fraser
Date: 11/9/2014 4:56:00 PM

Ah! the Blonde ;-)

Jan Allison
Date: 11/9/2014 4:50:00 PM

:-) thanks James - am still giggling at your poem :-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 11/9/2014 3:00:00 PM

Poor fly....luckily it is fictional.....hugs Tim

Jan Allison
Date: 11/9/2014 3:06:00 PM

:-) Hugs Jan xx

David Meade

Date: 11/9/2014 2:17:00 PM

The fly said: "though you won today the war is not over -- we will be back!" Nicely done Ms. Jan -- may all your days be fly-free.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/9/2014 2:19:00 PM

Thanks David :-) hugs Jan xx

Jack Horne

Date: 11/9/2014 2:12:00 PM

lol, the question is: did you still eat your lunch? Thanks for a laugh. Really loved your poem with Andrea too - big congrats on that, my friend x

Jan Allison
Date: 11/9/2014 2:13:00 PM

Thanks Jack - its purely a fictional write and thanks for the comment about Peter Pumpkin - we had fun writing it and I am honoured to have worked with Andrea she is awesome and so inspirational:-) Hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/9/2014 2:07:00 PM

Cute one..Got a chuckle..I guess that lunch was ruined..Enjoyed reading this one today...Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 11/9/2014 2:09:00 PM

Thanks Sara:-) Hugs Jan xx

Gary Bateman

Date: 11/9/2014 1:54:00 PM

Jan, I really like this one -- So Cute!! What happened to your lunch?? (HA! HA!) Cheers and Best Wishes, Gary

Jan Allison
Date: 11/9/2014 1:57:00 PM

Purely fiction Gary:-) Hugs Jan xx