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Buried Alive

Alone and detached void of all feeling I ponder the past that caught me at last crumbling bones darkened cold stones crushed by gravity falling apart divided ten fold memoirs of horrors delinquently paid dying this death lying to fate haunting seeps over my ghostly gasps this coffin of roots choking my cries clawing at rocks ghostly visions creeping close screaming inside I curse the dirt my mouth fills with earth

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Date: 6/11/2010 9:20:00 AM
Hello Mitch, well now that someone paid this spoiled brats membership,, i had a thought once inspired by you I do recall the -dragon- poem of yours... Well it is no secret i love unicorns and dragons... And how awesome it would be to have a contest of Dragons,,, I would love to read the best dragon poem....Ha, yes i would rather read good tales in a contest than what is real,,,, Thank you very much Mitch for your words... By the way I can't wait to read your other Half of your poem,..P.d.
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Date: 5/25/2010 8:31:00 PM
This is really nicely written, Mitch--really liked the progression in your poem, makes me feel buried alive myself! Great job with this one :)
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Date: 5/24/2010 11:29:00 PM make it sound so real, like you have maybe in a dream. im sure it's a very frightening nightmare to be buried alive ever in life. very good. -Always&Forever Lynette
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Date: 5/21/2010 9:58:00 AM
ohhh good one and I love the way the form dribbles down to the!
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Date: 5/20/2010 6:34:00 PM
with my opp. this is one is not like you. Going to my favs. What an ending for your poem and us,..enjoyed,..p.d.
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Date: 5/20/2010 7:09:00 AM
Good luck in the dark contest looks like a winner...Keep the creative pen flowing..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work..Sara
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Date: 5/20/2010 6:56:00 AM
Keep going back to the lines "memoirs of horrors delinquently paid," Mitch. Unfortunately, this is the reason so many live with regrets. If we pay for each mistake as we go along, they don't seem to come back in "ghostly visions" to haunt us. Very insightful! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/20/2010 6:11:00 AM
Sweet! This isn't free verse, it's blank verse because it has a rhythm. DON'T insult this with free verse. Good imagery, it lends to the feeling of being dragged into the earth, gravity piling on the rocks- that's good. And when the past finally catches up and engulfs you, it connects it all in a metaphor. Keep it up
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