Andrea Dietrich Poet Sonnet

Notes About The Poem

Dedicated as usual to Guy Loranger of Quebec

For Edward Ibeh's  This Or That, Vol 23 Poetry Contest

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Building Tension

He simply looked at me. When I looked back,
he held that gaze. It nearly made me blush.
For building tension he sure had the knack,
for by the time he left, I had a crush.

He’d smiled with his mouth, but also with his eyes.
I had to know him more. That week I thought
about him all the time. He was a prize
that if I won meant I would have his heart.

He came back twice to where I worked at night.
We talked and flirted; then he asked me out!
The tension building in me I could not fight.
I knew his kiss I could not do without.

We took it slow. When our lips met at last,
it was a kiss that could not be surpassed.

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Edward Ibeh March 4, 2024 at 9:07 AM Heartiest congratulations on your win in my contest with this fantastic poem, Andrea:-) I loved it!

Christuraj Alex March 1, 2024 at 8:24 PM A grand sonnet on the theme, Building Tension. "We took it slow. When our lips met at last, it was a kiss that could not be surpassed." Highly passionate ending. Congratulations!

Paula Goldsmith March 1, 2024 at 8:53 AM Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your lovely/romantic write/story. Have a great/blessed day with your win.....................

David Fisher February 23, 2024 at 4:51 PM I really enjoyed the structure of your lines, with endings where they fit best. And the flow is so natural, like their getting together, perhaps.

Sotto Poet February 23, 2024 at 12:18 PM Andrea, this poem is quite remarkable indeed. The depiction of attraction is enthralling and unique, exploring the slow and intricate growth of feelings. Love is often seen as a precious treasure, adding a delightful flair that captures its core of obsession. Something is captivating about how people can feel such intense attraction in their youth and also as they grow older. Yet, caution must be taken when assessing these opinions.

Jay Narain February 23, 2024 at 10:38 AM Romantic poem. Your poems are always winners.

Bill Baker February 22, 2024 at 9:54 PM Very engaging poetry, Andre. You had my attention from the smiling eyes. lol Good luck in the contest, my friend. Bill

Paige Hind February 22, 2024 at 6:07 PM Romantic! Good luck!

Robert Schatz February 22, 2024 at 5:52 PM I can only echo the comments of John, Sara, Yann, and Duke. Good luck in the contest!

John Lawless February 22, 2024 at 3:50 PM Ah, the tension of pursuit and apprehension masterfully captured. Well done Andrea

Yann Rolland February 22, 2024 at 3:20 PM t.yhis is quite romantic and passionate, dear poet, love poems are not easy, you found the key, to open your heart, superbe poem and enjoyed a lot

Duke Beaufort February 22, 2024 at 3:12 PM I love the description of attraction and how it builds in a way that's not instantaneous. It's also cute that the character thinks of this love as a prize. Really characteristic of infatuation. It's funny how some of us can feel such attraction when young and also when older. We just have to be very careful about acting on it if we're under contract. lol.