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I filled a small trench that yielded fresh water. Built as a serpentine and with a sharp corner. A small waterfall sang a melodious sound, A lulled sleepiness induced when it hit the ground. On each side of the rill, fair, watery plants grew, A great choice of Algae. Ferns, a lobelia blue. Fitful arrowheads and water lilies adorn. Cardinals and others begin their flight in the morn. Already prepared was a slightly large pond, Well covered with cement mixed with soil beyond, I planted some hyacinths and water lilies. Soon, dragonflies waltz around like sillies. My final job was planting a dwarf willow. Don't be surprised, robins made it their pillow.

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Date: 9/20/2024 10:02:00 AM
Soon dragons flies through walls, And Robbins will make the tree their pillow. Love those lines. Hugs eve soup mail
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Date: 9/18/2024 10:41:00 AM
Dear victor first of all, i tried commenting on your nursery rhyme but it kept giving me error, secondly i love both the innocent and inspiring nursery rhyme as well as this! Your sonnet flows with such beautiful imagery! So captivating and creatively woven’ i especially love the line “ I planted some hyacinths and water lilies. Soon, dragonflies waltz around like sillies.” how stunning and your rhymes are as always so profound! Pleasure reading this poetic gem! Sending you light
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Date: 9/17/2024 8:10:00 PM
This is a gorgeous sonnet. The charming rhymes bring life to a picturesque scene.
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Date: 9/17/2024 3:56:00 PM
So cute the last several lines were adorable
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Date: 9/17/2024 8:03:00 AM
Rich in soothing imagery of nature! Hugs ~ Kim
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Date: 9/17/2024 5:46:00 AM
Nature endlessly inspires. Nice write Vic
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Date: 9/17/2024 5:41:00 AM
Oh I love this! I enjoyed it very much. A Fave for me :)
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Date: 9/17/2024 1:01:00 AM
Wonderful imagery and great rhymes! I’d love to visit! Do you have a garden Victor?
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Date: 9/16/2024 10:46:00 PM
Enjoyed this delicately rhyming poem, dear Victor. I can visualize this beautiful rill and the little pond you made with its edges covered with moss and plants and water lilies growing in them. What a beautiful ambiance you have created with birds resting on the willow tree and butterflies flitting around flowers.
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Date: 9/16/2024 6:49:00 PM
What a beautifully tranquil place this poem evokes! I greatly enjoyed your poem, and the picture, which makes a lovely companion.
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Date: 9/16/2024 3:23:00 PM
This is so sweet it fluffed up my heart today and boy did I need that Victor.
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Date: 9/16/2024 2:52:00 PM
Ahh!! Reads like a lovely place. Water features in a yard can be very lovely. Thanks for sharing your talent with us. Sara K
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Date: 9/16/2024 1:59:00 PM
Very nice Sonnet, best wishes
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Date: 9/16/2024 11:28:00 AM
- A place I could sit and enjoy for hours ... look at this beauty you describe, Victor - A wonderful poem ... a paradise in a garden :) - hugs
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Date: 9/16/2024 9:21:00 AM
Dear Victor, So full of nature and life and what is not to be loved about your poem. God has given you a gift as gardener and poet. I am so glad to be your friend. - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 9/16/2024 3:59:00 AM
What a beautiful tranquil scene you have set, dear Victor. A small waterfall sang a melodious sound, A lulled sleepiness induced when it hit the ground. What a wonderful afternoon nap that would induce. ..Hugs
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